First Draft--new Folk tune, comments please

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hi friends and acquaintances--here's my very rough first draft of a new folk songa few comments:--unfortunately it's all me, my crappy guitar, and my crappy vocal--both tracks will be reworked, builds added, etc. this is a true first draft--sorry for screwing up the 3rd verse (hell, maybe the entire song...it IS a rough draft--sorry for the chop up parts, read "rough draft" again...LOL--any comments welcome, especially on LYRICSCHORUSANYTHING BUT PRODUCTION, I KNOW IT'S CRAPPY (though it took an afternoon to "produce", and an hour for the lyrics and another for the "music"...--i have several changes already in the pike, etc.thank you for any time you can lend http://www.taximusic.com/download/20023 ... nt.mp3Just An AccidentVerse 1Broken windshield diamonds glisten in the sunOne cop jokes 'bout safety glass, the rookie just looks numbA chalk line in the pavement where they drew his final breathTraces one more story line. . .but this aint no movie setVerse 2She said he came from nowhere, from behind that Greyhound busHis face looked like a lunatic, and man how right she wasShe told the cop she tried to stop while she glanced up at the crowdShe fell down to her knees. . .she sobbed so very loudChorusNo lights on that county van, no wailing siren soundNo next of kin to notify, just a blanket as his shroudNo wasted words in mourning, not an extra second spentAfter all it was just an accidentAfter all he was just an accident(After all it was just an accident)Verse 3No preacher said last rights for him, 'cuz he had no rights at allHe left them with his needle in that dirty bathroom stallBut his wild ass smile had purpose, he knew it was his timeHe planned that mad dash perfectly. . .to never reach that center line