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[kentraco]

I've just completed a self-produced songwriter demo, and I wasn't writing for any particular genre of music.One song is the product of a dream (the title) and a newspaper article (the details), and it turned out to be Latin-flavored even though I don't speak Spanish and had to do some studying before I could sing it. I didn't even know what the title meant until I looked it up. The song almost wrote itself, which is pretty weird.So I'd be very interested to hear how others react to it. The track is "Mi Corazon", and it's at http://www.masonjarre.com The lyric link is below the songs.(By the way...I'm a writer - not a singer!)Thanks!Mason JarreStyle__ On target for today's market in ________ genre__ Not current sounding__ Hard to classifyStyle Comments:___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Melody__ Good music in verses__ Verses could be stronger__ Good music in chorus__ Verses/Chorus sound too similar__ Memorable Hook__ Hook not obvious enoughMelody Comments:___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Structure__ Intro too long__ Well-written structure__ Good sectional contrast__ Not enough sectional contrast__ Could use a bridgeStructure Comments:___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lyric__ First line makes me want to hear more__ Engaging__ Cohesive__ Good use of imagery__ Rhymes well__ Communicates emotion to listener__ Lacks focus__ Unique__ Too abstract__ I don't understand it__ Too predictable__ Too many cliches__ Awkward phrasing__ Vocal does not help to sell song__ Vocal does help to sell songLyrcial Comments:___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Title__ Good title__ So-So title__ Can't determine title by listening__ Could appear in a more strategic place__ Doesn't repeat enough__ Repeats too oftenTitle Comments:___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________OVERALL COMMENTS___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Now give a rating 1 to 10, 1 being the worst, 10 being the best:__ Music__ Lyrics__ Marketability__ Arrangement__ Production__ EngineeringNOW. Would you walk this into a label credibility on this music?__ YES__ NONOW. Give a reason why did or didn't forward this:___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

[kentraco]

Wow. It's like dropping a stone into a dark well - and never hearing it hit water.

[timbehrens]

Hi Mason,I'm new here as well and am doing a lot of reading. I enjoyed the overall feel of your song and just wanted to offer a few reactions you might get if you submit it. Please take this with a grain of salt as I don't have a lot of experience at Taxi.First, I think the music would benefit from sounds that aren't quite so obviously synth sounds. If you could find a good trumpet sound for some of the melodies, I think that would help. I know we're not all made of money, but I just recently splurged for East West's Symphonic Orchestra and you can get some pretty convincing results from that.Second thing I would offer is that the melody doesn't have to move all over the place to be good, but when you are singing lines that melodically float around the same note, you need to be sure to articulate your words.... its harder to discern vocals when they come at such a fast pace.Anyways, I enjoyed listening. Best wishes to you and good luck with your musical journeys.