Opinions please

[Casey H]

Can I ask a few of your for an opinion here? My song, "What a World", is generally well received. However, sometimes I get the feedback that I shouldn't have opened it with the chorus or that the time between the opening chorus and the first real chorus is too long, leaving the listener waiting long for the hook. I also sometimes think that period is too long. The first chorus (other than the opening one) comes in around 1:23 in the current version.So I did some cut and paste experimenting tonight. Here are 3 versions:(1) The original.http://www.broadjam.com/transmit/transm ... bndsq=1(2) The song with the vocal removed from the intro chorus making it a pure musical intro.(3) Same as #3 but with the intro shortened.http://www.broadjam.com/transmit/transm ... ndsq=2It's hard for me to be objective since I am so used to how it is now. it feels naked to me without the opening chorus. But what's best from an A&R perspective?What do you think? Which one do you like best?Thanks! Casey

[squidlips]

For big time punch, I'd go with #3. They absolutely can't fault you for that intro. Okay, actually they could (cuz they can do whatever they want) but honestly, they shouldn't. So there.

[diogenes]

Well, I'm A&R for Haight Rite Records, does that count? My opinion is go with the original, otherwise, I feel like I'm waiting to long for the chorus. I don't think the distance between the intro chorus and the "real" chorus is to long at all. It's a well done song with peaks and valleys, as good songs should have. I think of it as sort of a teaser, and you haven't quite let the cat out of the bag yet, ya know what I mean, it gives you somewhere to go when you do get to it at 1:23, but if you did wanna shave it down a hair you could cut that first pre-chorus, but by now I'm sitting here TRYING to find something...I hope that came out clear. Later-Dax

[elser]

I like the first one best. For my taste it really works, but I'm always interested in pushing the envelope in song form. It seems like kind of familiar form though I'm not sure where I've heard it before. It's kinda like when we hear the intro chorus we know what we're getting but then the long verse and pre-chorus create some tension, anticipation, so that when the real chorus comes it has a little more punch. For me it's killer.

[geo]

Hey Casey, I like the original best, think it works as a good intro the way the music is and the it's a good opening line/stanza (and it doesn't hurt to have the hook upfront like that). This is one of my favs of yours, I like the vocal treatment, I would stay with the original.... Geo

[davewalton]

I would say either #1 (the original) or #3 (the shortened intro). Now, to muddy the waters, a #3 would be really good with intro vocals ("What a world... this could be... for you and me..." or whatever it is) and then right into the verse like you're doing.

[Casey H]

Quote:I would say either #1 (the original) or #3 (the shortened intro). Now, to muddy the waters, a #3 would be really good with intro vocals ("What a world... this could be... for you and me..." or whatever it is) and then right into the verse like you're doing. Dave: I thought of that... Shorten the chorus by 1/2 but leave the vocal... I could try that... It sounds like most like it as is... I got paranoid because I am taking CDs to the RR and will most likely get some pro feedback...Thanks all! Casey

[hummingbird]

Quote:I would say either #1 (the original) or #3 (the shortened intro). Now, to muddy the waters, a #3 would be really good with intro vocals ("What a world... this could be... for you and me..." or whatever it is) and then right into the verse like you're doing. I suggest that too.... start with the hook, and lead into the first verse.

[billg]

Hey Casey, I like the original way best.

[trentoliphant]

My vote would be for a shortened #1 intro (like Vicki suggests). Start at the second "What a world". Of course not being an A&R person or even having had any success yet, you can take it for what it is worth.