Sadness Comes

[adrianne76]

Here's another new song looking for feedback. It's called "Sadness Comes" and can be heard via my taxi page:http://www.taximusic.com/hosting/home.p ... rianneWhat genre do you think it is? What artists would you compare it to? Other thoughts?Here are the lyrics:Sadness comesLike tears fall from your eyesLike an unwanted goodbyeLike a long, hard rainSadness comesSadness goesLike the spring sun melts the snowLike a gentle breeze that blowsLike a scar that slowly fadesSadness goesSo its okaySometimes you just have to cryBut if you stay sad foreverAll your days will pass you bySadness comesBut just like the seasons changeAnd how night turns back into daySadness comesAnd then it goes awayThanks for the feedback!

[sgs4u]

Quote:What genre do you think it is? singer songwriter, maybe adult contemporayQuote:What artists would you compare it to? Sheryl Crowe, Cowboy JunkiesQuote:Other thoughts?Maybe punt the drum track, & try to make the whole thing darker, organ's maybe a little loud. Use a conga or other percussion, just not kick & snare. The dobro's beautiful. It wouldn't hurt to make that louder. The singing in the bridge is a little raw. It's distracting from the peace of the piece. But are these suggestions really important?... nahIt's a very pretty song. Nice work!

[adrianne76]

Thanks for your thoughts, Steve. But what do you mean by "the singing is raw?"

[sgs4u]

OK, now I have to listen to the whole thing again(hrumph, darn Taxi system), without being able to fast forward, hopefully I get a marker while it's going by... 1:36 'til the end of the bridge, the singing just trails off into reverb. at that point, the song seems more about the production that the song or the singer, and it lost my interest. The singing's not mesmerizing or great at those points, but it does sound honest. The fx make it seems apologized for.but don't take my word for it...keep asking around

[squidlips]

Hi Adrianne. I like this song too. And ditto what Steve said above, only double.Skip all the drumming, go with some light hand drumming, nothing intrusive.As for the bridge.....your voice is too lovely to load with effects like that. You go from raw or dry (meaning no effects at all, no reverb that I could tell) to a heavily affected, dreamy wash on everything in the bridge. And your voice is buried under the instruments during the bridge too, right at a time when the audience wants to be rewarded and hear your beautiful range. If you want it real, keep it raw all the way through. Or add more effect to the verses and less on the bridge and even it all up. One or the other. Definitely, definitely, pull your vocals up in the bridge so they're as up front as they are in the verses. Too pretty to hide.I'd pick singer/songwriter, AC and film/tv for listings, unless you're looking for a label to pick you up, in which case, you can skip film.This is just my 2c, though. You've got a lovely, uncomplicated voice. Why mess with it?

[bc]

adrianne,All business aside, this sonic vignette is a comforting balm for anyone who has fought with depression. After losing our son, my wife and I have lived the simple verses in your song. I appreciate what you are attempting with your art. Beautiful. Production wise it's close. Steve and squid have solid advice. This song will fit a host of movies so make sure you're pitching it to film and tv. best,bc

[Casey H]

Very pretty and sad. I really like your voice. I agree with what's been said already regarding genre. My guess would be it's best market other than for your own CD would be film/TV. Sometimes there are calls for songs or pieces of songs about a topic such as "sadness". Were you writing about depression or just sadness? Having struggled with some demons in my own life, I can relate to the latter. You never say in the song why you are sad which makes me think it is more about depression. However, from a "depth" of lyrics perspective you may get feedback that you need to add something as to "why" or clarify that it is for no reason. Many of my best songs came out of a depressed time in my life. Writing is so catharitic. Anyway, very nice! Casey

[adrianne76]

Thanks to all for your awesome feedback. This song was initially inspired by a scene on tv when a dying mother (cancer) was talking to her teenage daughter, who was crying. She was talking to her about the fact that she was going to die and she said something along the lines of "It's okay to be sad. It's normal. Just don't stay sad forever." And I was blown away. I thought it was so simple and beautiful.To answer the above question, I wasn't necessarily writing about sadness or depression, I was problably writing about both. We all have times when it seems like things really suck, whether we have a really good reason for it (like loss) or whether it's biological (like depression). I didn''t want to put "me" in the song, which is why there is no explanation as to "why" I am sad. I didn't want it to be about me. I wanted to leave it wide open. Not sure whether or not that will work for film/tv/industry folks. I guess the proof will be in the forwards (or lack of)!Thanks again!

[rnrmachine]

Pretty cool song. I like your voice, sweet yet a touch of maturity. Very nice recording quality. At times I think your vocal is a smidge too processed, "unwanted" being what I am refering to, in the beginning of the song. Most of the time it is lovely as is.Have to go but will listen more later.Rob

[adrianne76]

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