So I wrote this song...

[drumbri]

I wrote this song for a band I play in (the parrotheads) a Jimmy Buffett tribute band. I was very excited about it at first but now I think I want a Jamaican or Caribbean style singer. Its me on the vocal track along with a femail vocalist on high harmonies but I am a drummer not a singer. Anyway Im going to rerecord it and wanted some feedback on how to make it better.www.myspace.com/briancourtright

[rnrmachine]

As it first started playing I imediately could here that song in one of the many carribean type movies like "Captain Ron" and other family/comedy or comedy/drama movies. Don't take that in a bad way. That is basically my limited experience in this style of music. As I listen.. I can really see the movie opening with shots of carribean isles and your song playing along. The only thing I honestly can think to make the song better (remember I have limited experience in this genre) is finding a singer that sings that style normally, like you mentioned.The worst thing I hear in your vocal is mainly the begining parts where you seem too "anouncer singing" or "mono tone" perhaps. Hey people up on your feet, summer's here you can feel the heat. It's not very attractive they way you are singing it. Your voice itself is fine. That is the only bad thing I would say, otheriwse I thought it was great.. I'm waiting for the movie "Get Away Isle" lolEDIT: I tossed ya a friend invite on myspace if you are interested.

[johnhampt]

Very Happy clever song. Catchy for what it is. To be honest though, a better singer would make this song HUGELY more marketable. Actually, singer is not too bad but the vocal melody seems to be stuck on the notes G and A a bit much. Perhaps more range of notes could be all it needs.

[sgs4u]

johnhampt, Welcome to the Taxi forums. I thought I'd take a minute and ask some other members if your first 5 posts are making anyone's life better today... because I for one, would love for your input to be valuable. Right now, it just looks like you're a newbie bummer, telling everyone waht's wrong with their songs while you think your's are "Hits."Quote:To be honest though, a better singer would make this song HUGELY more marketable. Actually, singer is not too bad but the vocal melody seems to be stuck on the notes G and A a bit much. Perhaps more range of notes could be all it needs. Quote:Otherwise, it's a bit dated sounding. This is the stuff I grew up with but I am not sure if there is a particularly large audience for this...Quote:Definite Coldplay influence. Not too often I hear a song I think is hooky but this one is. I only listened to it once (which I think is the best way to give an honest opinion) and nothing struck me as bad or out of place. It really is a pleasant little tune. Good job.Quote:Only negative comment on the performance was the drummer and the poor fills, especially off of the snare.The song did not particularly strike me. It kind of didn't go anywhere. I only listened to it once and I think there may have been a bridge around 3/4 through but it wasn't enough of a change to stick out. The song hung around the key of F a bit much. If you could get away from that in at least part of the song it would help the mundane feeling. Quote:These two songs are the best I got at a hit and. Please, any feedback is appreciated.http://www.taximusic.com/hosting/home.p ... ampton"You Had Your Chance""Catch and Release"

[johnhampt]

Thanks for the welcome, Bro. I am sorry if I cannot be honest in my postings. If I hear someone's song should I give dishonest input? I think you are being a little sensitive needlessly. You also posted my comments our of context and did not quote the good things I had to say about the songs. Please, be honest.I may be new to the board but I have been around for awhile. Please feel free to check out my songs I have here, most of which are complete tripe and won't ever get forwarded. Please, Bro. Let's not get off to a bad start. I need a lot of help on here with my songs and I appreciate everyone's feedback on here.Thanks!

[Casey H]

Quote:johnhampt, Welcome to the Taxi forums. I thought I'd take a minute and ask some other members if your first 5 posts are making anyone's life better today... because I for one, would love for your input to be valuable. Right now, it just looks like you're a newbie bummer, telling everyone waht's wrong with their songs while you think your's are "Hits."Quote:To be honest though, a better singer would make this song HUGELY more marketable. Actually, singer is not too bad but the vocal melody seems to be stuck on the notes G and A a bit much. Perhaps more range of notes could be all it needs. Quote:These two songs are the best I got at a hit and. Please, any feedback is appreciated.http://www.taximusic.com/hosting/home.p ... ampton"You Had Your Chance""Catch and Release"Hey Steve my friend ,I read John's posts and they were just good constructive feedback. I didn't read anything bad at all into his posts. In fact, one of the biggest complaints people have is when folks come on a message board, ask people to review their songs, but don't review anyone else's. John came here and took the time to listen to quite a few songs from other members. So, I say "Welcome John!", please keep up the honest feedback, and Steve- have Canadian beer...or two... (that is meant in fun )... Casey

[sgs4u]

Quote:Hey Steve my friend ,I read John's posts and they were just good constructive feedback. I didn't read anything bad at all into his posts... and Steve - have Canadian beer...or two... (that is meant in fun )... Casey(hic) (burp) ok, it's all me, I had a lousy day I was searching around, ran across this topic on another forum site, and I was engulfed by a very engaging but asinine exercise that supposedly demonstrates that not all songs, need improvements. for a complete waste of your time, click here This famous guy songwriter, posted his already cut Kenny Chesney lyric, and then a bunch of newbie songwriters started making suggestions. The point of the thread turned into how we always assume our input is valid, even when something doesn't need to be fixed. There was a lot more whining and finger-pointing crap to weed through tho. I'm sure glad we never do that stuff here. John, I'm sorry. I'm shallow and easily swayed... steve

[sgs4u]

Quote:Very Happy clever song. Catchy for what it is. To be honest though, a better singer would make this song HUGELY more marketable. Actually, singer is not too bad but the vocal melody seems to be stuck on the notes G and A a bit much. Perhaps more range of notes could be all it needs. I agree with everything johnhampt says here... tho the the melody's catchy in a one-note samba kind of way. Get a singer that you love drumming for, to sing it for/with you. Make it a party. thread returned safely

[johnnydean1]

Quote:Quote:Hey Steve my friend ,I read John's posts and they were just good constructive feedback. I didn't read anything bad at all into his posts... and Steve - have Canadian beer...or two... (that is meant in fun )... Casey(hic) (burp) ok, it's all me, I had a lousy day I was searching around, ran across this topic on another forum site, and I was engulfed by a very engaging but asinine exercise that supposedly demonstrates that not all songs, need improvements. for a complete waste of your time, click here John, I'm sorry. I'm shallow and easily swayed... steveLeave Steve alone!!!!!He's just a big Teddybear who's spent too long at the honeypot'He is shallow but easily swayed???? I don't think so.More heaved with great difficulty.

[johnhampt]

Back to this thread...You said you wanted to record this song. Was this a live cut? If so, damn good!! Like better than Jimmy Buffet live...