It Makes No Sense - New song, please critique

[rockmann]

Hi folks,Looking forward to comments on this new song. Now, this song is getting back to our 'roots'. http://www.soundclick.com/util/streamm3 ... iLyrics:It Makes No SenseWords & Music Steve M. Mann 7/16/2006Performed by Project-43: http://www.project-43.com/Light speed through the game of lifeWe do it to ourselves day and nightFail to enjoy what’s oursWhy all the rushing to the endIt’s the journey that’s important friendThe end will come soon enough(But I like it, I like it like this…Yeah I like it, I like it like this…)Seems our lives could be betterWe work so hard to get whateverThen throw it away when we’re doneNever stop to gaze at the starsIn a rush to hop in our carsNo time for you, we’re on the run[Chorus]It makes no sense, none at all to meWhy we race thru life full speed aheadIt makes no sense, it makes no sense(But I like it, I like it like this…Yeah I like it, I like it like this)Before we know it we’re at the endIn the ground, hoping to transcendThe life long rush that began day oneNo slowing now we’re almost thereWhere that is we do not careOur lives are nothing but a blur[Solo](But I like it, I like it like this…Yeah I like it, I like it like this)Going light speedGoing even fasterRushing to the endWe work so hardThrow it all awayLife is done; nothing to show[Chorus]It makes no sense, none at all to meWhy we race thru life full speed aheadIt makes no sense, it makes no sense================================Thanks in advance for listening and taking the time to comment.

[rockmann]

Thanks everyone!!

[gitarrero]

hi there,my spontaneous feedback: the intro melody-gits have some strange intervalls and doesn't sound really to the point.The chorus falls apart from the verse - it sounds like a part from another song to me.the vocals are in the verse quite 80s hair-metal, that could be good if that is searched in a listing (if that's your goal).all the best,Martin