One of my best songs returned

[euromantix]

Hi guys 'n' gals. I was a little surprised this got rejected, as it was on-target, and the review seemed positive - apart from one thing... this one person didn't think the verse fit together with the rest of the song. I thought it was original, not out of place. That said, I think this is far too subjective to reject an otherwise fitting song due to, especially when the chorus is as strong as I feel it is. Haven't there been thousands of hit records with a great chorus, where you can't even remember what the verse was??First things first, here's the listing:S090417PR - POP ROCK SONGS a la Pink, Maroon Five, Rob Thomas, etc., are wanted by a very busy and well-established Production Music Library that is headed up by a three-time Emmy-nominated composer. They are looking to add new material to their catalog for film and TV placements, along with other avenues they pitch to such as video-game projects, etc. Male and Female vocals are fine. Performances need to be solid and Master Quality along with state-of-the-art instrument sounds are definitely a factor. Please submit one to three songs online or per CD, include lyrics. All submissions will be screened and critiqued by TAXI and must be received no later than Friday, April 17, 2009. TAXI #S090417PRHere's the song I submitted:'My Final Frontier (Terminal 3)'http://www.taximusic.com/stream/98455/_ ... .mp3Here's the return review:There is a lot going on in this song. The lyrics are witty and have a pop punk vibe to their delivery. The music has an earnest, almost romantic feel. The music and the vocals seem to fit well together in the intro and the chorus. The mood of the music in the verse feels out of place in this song. Maybe you could experiment with your approach to this section, focusing on matching the music to the lyrics.Style:The style of this song is within what the listing is asking for.Overall Comments:Hey guys, thanks for your submission. You have a wittiness that draws in the listener. The lyrics have a good sense of humor. The only thing I'd change is the music in the verses, which feels out of place right now.Sound Quality:There is a bit of inconsistency between sections in the song.The main reason(s) you were or were not forwarded for this listing is:There is a feeling of disjointedness between the verse and chorus.Lyrics: You said you needed me and loved me That you’d put nobody above me That’s why I waited there all night… So thanks a lot for saying nothing I thought that we were really something But then again so is she... Verse: Don’t believe in holiday romances But sparks that flew on the beach – they stayed alive And so we said that distance wouldn’t matter We’d ride our changing tides But it’s so hard – the phone ain’t enough Then like my heart the webcam crashes Chorus: I’d build a bridge over the sea if she could be with me Or I’d get Scottie to beam her here ‘cos she’s MY FINAL FRONTIER I’d stop the spinning of the world if she could be my girl Or I’d get Scottie to beam her near ‘cos she’s my final frontier My final frontier - MY FINAL FRONTIER Verse: I walked on the plane at Terminal 3 Transatlantic through the night – couldn’t sleep... In your bed ‘cos something wasn’t right girl Is the tide goin’ out on me? But now I’m home one time ain’t enough ‘n’ in my nightmares your plane crashes (Repeat Chorus) Middle-8: You said you needed me and loved me That you’d put nobody above me I sat and waited there all night Thinking you were on the next flight So thanks a lot for saying nothing I thought that we were really something Then so is she – the hostess I met her at Terminal 3 (adlibs) (Repeat Chorus x2)

[teleblaster]

I like this track alot, very catchy chorus. I agree that there's a lot going on in this song lyrically. I'm not really sure what the critique about the lyric and music not matching on the verse was all about. Only thing I might suggest is pairing down some of the ideas and get the chorus to pop a bit more in relation to the verses -- just a hunch.Very enjoyable track. Hope this helpsErichTake a minute and give me your thoughts on my returned song on this board when you get a minute or 2 pleeze.. thx