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DA NERD SONG

Post by irwin » Sat Mar 18, 2006 4:21 am

hi,Title 'Da Nerd Song'. please review the song.www.soundclick.com/Irwindemo When page show up;click on 'music'Then click on 'lo fi'And then the song will begin playing.Irwin Abrigo songwriter Da Nerd Song© Irwin Byron Abrigo(No.1) I’ve been decent for so longAnd I’ve been kicked and I’ve been pushed aroundEverybody see me as the nerd they knownfrom back in class(No.2) A little space is what I needI’m putting on my jacket my boots and my jeansAnd you know it’s gonna be a shockWhen yoh see me down town walking with my cap turn back(No.3) I’m being a bad boy, a bad boyTonight I’m being a bad, bad, boyI’m being a bad boy, a bad boyA bad! bad! bad! bad! boy tonight(Repeat)(No.4) I got my keys, now to my truckam taking a cruise around townAnd if you’re not sure of what I’m doing you may stop and ask(No.5) I'm picking up a girl who has had it toogonna put on her tight jeans her jacket and shoeA little respect is what I deservesIt ain’t gonna come is something I’ve gadda earn(Repeat No: 3)(No.6)You may say you disappointedYou may say that I’m acting weirdBut some people never get that messageUnless you’re being something that you ain’t yeah(Repeat No.3)Irwin Byron Abrigoall rights reserved

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Re: DA NERD SONG

Post by Casey H » Sat Mar 18, 2006 5:42 am

Quote:Da Nerd Song© Irwin Byron Abrigo(No.1) I’ve been decent for so longAnd I’ve been kicked and I’ve been pushed aroundEverybody see me as the nerd they knownfrom back in class(No.2) A little space is what I needI’m putting on my jacket my boots and my jeansAnd you know it’s gonna be a shockWhen yoh see me down town walking with my cap turn back(No.3) I’m being a bad boy, a bad boyTonight I’m being a bad, bad, boyI’m being a bad boy, a bad boyA bad! bad! bad! bad! boy tonight(Repeat)(No.4) I got my keys, now to my truckam taking a cruise around townAnd if you’re not sure of what I’m doing you may stop and ask(No.5) I'm picking up a girl who has had it toogonna put on her tight jeans her jacket and shoeA little respect is what I deservesIt ain’t gonna come is something I’ve gadda earn(Repeat No: 3)(No.6)You may say you disappointedYou may say that I’m acting weirdBut some people never get that messageUnless you’re being something that you ain’t yeah(Repeat No.3)Hi IrwinPretty good... Here are some suggestions...The chorus x2 is way too much. I would save that for an outro and fade at the end of the song.There is no consistent rhyming pattern. Sometimes you can get away with that, but when sending to publishers, they immediately look for that. For film and TV, I have found that the general sound and subject matter can overshadow that requirement. If you were pitching this to publishers for artists, especially Nashville, this would most likely be a show-stopper.When labeling verses and choruses on a lyric sheet, mark as "Verse 1", Verse 2", "Chorus", etc. If you sent this to a publisher like this they might thing it has no chorus and not even listen.Of course, these are the 90% rules, there are exceptions... But best to play by the rules... Best regards Casey

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