20 second king o Hill Extravaganza

[suzdoyle]

This was sure a fun listing to try composing for. Wasn't it Mark Twain who said something like "Give me 6 minutes and I'll write 20 pages; give me 6 days and I'll write 2 paragraphs"? or something to that effect. Anyhoo, here's one of my tries at creating 20 seconds of world beat wackyness. Am finishing up vocals on another tomorrow morning.Wee-HAH!In Da World, mon:http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... tream=true ,Suz

[earblast]

I like your structure here with an intro, body and ending - nice bookend, catchy feel, fun, bouncy.To my ears, if you treated the body as an AABA form versus having the same chord progression, it would have been 'mo better...Also, probably a fine line, but I thought the listing said no vocals - the same lines the vocals are using could also be played by a "string" instrument perhaps..but again - love how much "form" you got in, in 20 secs...

[davewalton]

Hi Suz,Nice track. My suggestions for consideration:1. Bring up the volume for the intro kalimba and voices to give it more punch... maybe add some intro percussion too. 2. Make the ending a much bigger WOW factor. Big hit at the end with everything going to really go out with a bang, so to speak. Right now it goes back to the soft beginning and sounds like it's getting ready to start over again rather than ending.FWIW,Dave

[suzdoyle]

Hey Dave & Earblast;I much appreciate the suggestions -- they are right on! I'll tinker some more . . . Thank you so much! ,Suz