Re: 'Don't give me that look'

roycooper · Post by **roycooper** » Thu Sep 03, 2009 3:27 am

This was comment from 'Grandpaw'had to move it...sorryJust an Idea: Last verseNow look at my eyetry reading my lipno way I'm boardingon your fast sinking shipYou're treading on wateryour friends can all seeyou're in love with yourselfand there's no room for me

roycooper · Post by **roycooper** » Thu Sep 03, 2009 3:30 am

This was my reply.. all upto date now...-------------------------------------------------Thanks Grandpaw for the idea but in this case, I will leave it as is... I seem to remember something to do with sinking ship in one of your songs but cant remember which. Maybe I didn’t lol...I still love your song, Written in Red – I keep reading it. Here is a link to a video about the same subject… Nothing like yours though but I love it.Trinity Lane - Worth Calvaryhttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qnXwv3vxhgMI think for an older audience your idea for the last verse would be better... but I am thinking ahead with a younger audience.I wrote this song after listening and watching some modern teenage boys (friends) getting ready to go out clubbing. No it wasn’t me lol.Once I have music and vocals for the song sorted, I will be making a music video in a club... Lots of looks between boys and girls, (as the girl thinks the thoughts of the song and the boys act it out). I can see that last verse making for great footage with lots of facial expressions.I always think that a video can lift a song to another level..Thanks again Roy---------------------------------------

roycooper · Post by **roycooper** » Thu Sep 03, 2009 3:40 am

reply from 'Grandpaw' You are probably right about about your song, I don't get much opportunity to be involved with the younger generation except for my 21 month old Grandson. Maybe you can throw me a phrase or two here and there to help update some of my lyrics to current language.Lol. can't wait to hear hear and see the video. Now going to watch the link.

roycooper · Post by **roycooper** » Thu Sep 03, 2009 3:41 am

my reply to 'Grandpaw'Thanks for the email.. about this being the wrong place.. I just found out.. I have moved my songs and comments to lyric lovers... heheThat almost sounds naughty...I will have a look at your songs and see if I can offer any advice.. Of course my english is english english anyway lol...Roy