Girl! You Don't Have Me

[willied]

1st draft on this one. Plan on a country rock sound.You Don’t Have Me© Bill Duffy 2009V1Girl you’ve been talkingAbout you and meTelling everybodyHow it’s gonna beV2You have the houseFurniture and thingsYou say you’re happyCos you have everythingChorusBut! You don’t have meI’ve been set freeI’m historyNo You don’t have meYou can color me goneBaby I’ve moved onIts plan to seeGirl! You don’t have meV3Said you needed things You can see and touchI guess that my loveJust wasn’t enoughV4It’s time we called it quitsOn that we both agreeAfter all you gotEverything you needChorusBut! You don’t have meI’ve been set freeI’m historyNo You don’t have meYou can color me goneBaby I’ve moved onIts plan to seeGirl! You don’t have meTagIts plan to seeGirl! You don’t have me

[ontariolightning]

hey there Bill, nice and simple and straightforward of telling a former lover off, I think we've all written this song at one point, its a bit one dimensional but i already had a melody in my head, I see it more as pop rock than country but could be country too!If I were to pick a weak part of the lyric I'd leave the ee sound for the chorus and change the lines where the ee sound is in the verses so I don't get bored of the same soundGood luck!

[wtfman]

I have to agree. Though I would really like to hear the tune for this song. If the tune is strong the "ee" repetition won't be so pronounced. Like a girl that has something, body wise, she feels is unattractive and draws your attention to her pretty eyes so your attention is drawn to a part of her body she does have confidence in.I too see this song as more Pop than Country or Rock. Cute song though, kind of simple on the delivery but like the other person wrote, we have all pretty much "written" this song at one point. Thanks for sharing.Jeff

[willied]

Ontario and Badraven thank you for your comments. Working the music for this one and will make a few changes in the lyrics for the ee sound. I appreciate the help. I agree pop rock on this one.ThanksWillied