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Faithful To The Unfaithful

Post by ontariolightning » Fri May 16, 2008 10:59 am

Hey, Lqrose and I co wrote this, I envision it as a big ballad with a Faith Hill or Martina Mcbride vocal, just wondering if there's anything we're missing and if it's worth pursuing for music, thank you, take care!Faithful to the UnfaithfulLqpickens / Aaron AuthierCopyright 2008CountryI can hear you on the telephone downstairsYour voice liftin' and you're talkin' like she's thereYou think I'm sleepin', dreamin' in our bedBut deep down I'm just scared to deathAnd, you don't think I know, butI have this feelin', real empty feelin'I'm filled with shame, but I still end up stayin'It leaves me kneelin' and prayin' for the strength to leaveI'm not feeling hateful, Just so tired of beingFaithful to the unfaithfulMy love for you must be an addictionOnly thing I've been doin' Is just givin' InBaby, deep down, we both know we’re lyin’And even my own tears are cryin’You don’t think I know, butI have this feelin', real empty feelin'I'm filled with shame, but I still end up stayin'It leaves me kneelin' and prayin' for the strength to leaveI'm not feeling hateful, Just so tired of beingFaithful to the unfaithfulMy faith In you Is long gone But I keep holdin' on, 'n on, n 'on, But..I have this feelin', real empty feelin'I'm filled with shame, but I still end up stayin'It leaves me kneelin' and prayin' for the strength to leaveI'm not feeling hateful, Just so tired of beingFaithful to the unfaithfulI'm not feelin' hateful, Just so tired of bein'Faithful to the Unfaithful

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Re: Faithful To The Unfaithful

Post by ckbarlow » Sat May 17, 2008 6:34 am

Title is memorable; the lyrics are conversational as they should be for country; the structure has you set up perfectly for V-Ch-V-Ch-Br-Ch. The only thing I'm seeing -- and this concern might be totally addressed when you set it to music -- is the line lengths. I'm expecting this will be a slowish tempo? I look at it again and think, nah, it'll be fine. Totally depends how you set it to music. My opinion is that you've got a great start with these and should definitely pursue setting them to music.

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Post by momof4 » Mon May 19, 2008 9:36 am

i like it! nice job!

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Re: Faithful To The Unfaithful

Post by ontariolightning » Tue May 20, 2008 6:26 pm

Hey sorry, thanks CK, we're going to put music to it, I'm thinking something like faith hill lost, mid tempo with a big voice, the melody will smoothen the lines out, thanks again, there is a rewrite and I will post it nowHey Erin, thank you!

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Post by ontariolightning » Tue May 20, 2008 6:27 pm

Faithful To The UnfaithulLqpickens, Aaron AuthierCopyright 2008CountryI can hear you on the telephone downstairsYou’re laughin’ and talkin’ as if she's thereYou think I’m sleepin,’ dreamin’ in our bedThe truth is I’m wide awake insteadAnd you don’t think I know butI got this feelin’, real empty feelin’I’m filled with shame, cause I keep on stayin’and I’m kneelin’ and prayin’ for the strength to leaveI’m holdin’ on to air, and I’m not being fair to meDon’t want t’ be hateful, I’m just so tired of beingFaithful to the UnfaithfulCan’t understand why I’m silent when you speakNever thought that I'd ever become this weakI listen to you as you tell me another lieI don’t stop you and I'm askin' myself whyI just can’t tell you I know, butI got this feelin’, real empty feelin’I’m filled with shame, cause I keep on stayin’and I’m kneelin’ and prayin’ for the strength to leaveI’m holdin’ on to air, and I’m not being fair to meDon’t want t’ be hateful, I’m just so tired of beingFaithful to the UnfaithfulMy faith in you's been long goneand I won’t keep holdin’ on, n’ on’ n’ on, yeahI got this feelin’, real empty feelin’I’m filled with shame, and I won’t keep on stayin’and I’m kneelin’ and prayin’ for the strength to leaveSo I won’t hold onto air, cause I’m not being fair to meI won’t be hateful, I’ll just be so gratefulTo stop being Faithful to the Unfaithful

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Re: Faithful To The Unfaithful

Post by ontariolightning » Tue May 27, 2008 7:21 am

Hey all, here is another rewrite, any comments and suggestions are appreciatedFaithful To The UnfaithulLaurie Pickens, Aaron AuthierCopyright 2008CountryI can hear you on the telephone downstairsYou’re laughin’ and talkin’ as if she's thereYou think I’m sleepin,’ dreamin’ in our bedBut the truth is I’m wide awake insteadAnd you don’t think I know butI've got this feelin’, deep empty feelin’I’m filled with shame, cause I keep on stayin’So I’m kneelin’ and prayin’ for the strength to leaveI’m holdin’ on to air, and I’m not being fair to meI’m just so tired of being / Faithful to the UnfaithfulCan’t understand why I’m silent when you speakNever thought I'd ever become this weakI listen to you as you tell me another lieI don’t stop you and I'm wonderin' whyWhy I just can’t tell you I'veI've got this feelin’, deep empty feelin’I’m filled with shame, cause I keep on stayin’So I’m kneelin’ and prayin’ for the strength to leaveI’m holdin’ on to air, and I’m not being fair to meI’m just so tired of being / Faithful to the UnfaithfulMy faith in you Is long goneand I won’t keep holdin’ on, n’ on’ n’ on, yeahI've got this feelin’, deep empty feelin’I’m filled with shame, and I won’t keep on stayin’So I’m kneelin’ and prayin’ for the strength to leaveNo I won’t hold onto air, cause I’m not being fair to meI’ll just be so grateful / To stop being Faithful to the UnfaithfulYeah, I'll be so gratefulTo stop bein' faithful to the unfaithful

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Post by jeep » Tue Jun 03, 2008 6:19 pm

It's hard for me to say this [not really] is my favorite ..very nice

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Re: Faithful To The Unfaithful

Post by ontariolightning » Tue Jun 03, 2008 6:26 pm

hi jeep, ty, we're going to get it demoed, thanks for stopping by

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Re: Faithful To The Unfaithful

Post by marvin » Tue Jun 03, 2008 10:54 pm

Aaron, great lyric, I can envsion this one as a big ballad myself. I really love the chorus. Outstanding work all around. marvin.

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Re: Faithful To The Unfaithful

Post by ontariolightning » Thu Jun 05, 2008 5:12 pm

hey marvin, we thank you, we had a big ballad in mind when we wrote it, thanks, take care nowFinal versionFaithful To The UnfaithulLaurie Pickens, Aaron AuthierCopyright 2008CountryI can hear you, on the telephone downstairsYou’re laughin’ and talkin’, as if she's thereYou think I’m sleepin,’ dreamin’ in our bedBut the truth is I’m wide awake insteadAnd you don’t think I know butI've got this feelin’, deep empty feelingI’m filled with shame, cause I keep on stayingSo I’m kneelin’ and prayin’ for the strength to leaveI’m holdin’ on to air, and I’m not being fair to meI’m just so tired of being / Faithful to the UnfaithfulCan’t understand why, I’m silent when you speakNever thought I'd, ever become this weakI listen to you as you, tell me another lieI don’t stop you and I'm wonderin' whyWhy I just can’t tell youI've got this feelin’, deep empty feelingI’m filled with shame, cause I keep on stayingSo I’m kneelin’ and prayin’ for the strength to leaveI’m holdin’ on to air, and I’m not being fair to meI’m just so tired of being / Faithful to the UnfaithfulMy faith in you Is long,goneAnd I won't keep holding onI said my faith In you Is long goneAnd I'm not gonna hold onI've got this feelin’, deep empty feelin’I’m filled with shame, and I won’t keep on stayin’So I’m kneelin’ and prayin’ for the strength to leaveNo I won’t hold onto air, cause I’m not being fair to meI’ll just so tired of being / Faithful to the UnfaithfulI'm just so, so tired of beingFaithful to the Unfaithful

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