Faithful To The Unfaithful

momof4 · Post by **momof4** » Thu Jun 05, 2008 5:17 pm

looks good to me - can't wait to hear it!

ontariolightning · Post by **ontariolightning** » Thu Jun 05, 2008 5:18 pm

hey Erin again lol, I can't wait to hear it too, just trying to get the melody nowhow come they don't come easy, take care!

ontariolightning · Post by **ontariolightning** » Sun Dec 28, 2008 9:37 pm

Here Is a current rewrite, any suggestions and comments are really appreciated, thank you!Faithful To The UnfaithfulI hear you on the phone downstairsBy the way you're talkin'to her you wish she was thereAnd If she were and I weren't you'd be all over each otherBut you just say honey I've gotta take this call from workYou forget all about me when you're talkin' to herAnd I have this feelin' empty feelin'I'm filled with shame, but still end up stayin'It leaves me kneelin' and prayin' for strength to leaveI'm not feeling hateful, Just so tired of bein'Faithful To The UnfaithfulSo I'm tellin' you In this letterWhat I thought I wouldn't have had to everAnd It's got me thinkin' back to our wedding dayWay back when you loved me and I loved you the sameI never thought back then I would have to sayI have this feelin, empty feelin'I'm filled with shame, but still end up stayin'It leaves me kneelin' and prayin' for strength to leaveI'm not feeling hateful, Just so tired of bein'Faithful To The UnfaithfulI'm only takin' what I needAnd that's me (oh) 'CauseI have this feelin' empty feelin'I'm filled with shame, but still end up stayin'It leaves me kneelin' and prayin' for strength to leaveI'm not feeling hateful, Just so tired of bein'I'm just so tired of bein'Faithful To The UnfaithfulFaithful To The Unfaithful

jeep · Post by **jeep** » Mon Dec 29, 2008 7:31 am

Humm..I dont know I like the the first verse in the last final better but that's just me..I think I was set on hearing it that way ..I'm not much on critque's or anygood at it anyway..

ontariolightning · Post by **ontariolightning** » Mon Dec 29, 2008 10:12 am

thanks for your comments jeep, I do appreciate it, I will take a look at the first verse in the original to see what I can do, have a good day

momof4 · Post by **momof4** » Mon Dec 29, 2008 4:01 pm

one quick comment...the last line of V1: "you forget all about me talkin' to her"...could you make it "WHEN YOU'RE talkin' to her"? as is, it kind of sounds like he's forgetting about letting the wife talk to the other woman. i know that's not what you mean, but it clears it up and makes better sense that way. just my thoughts...erin

ontariolightning · Post by **ontariolightning** » Mon Dec 29, 2008 5:10 pm

hey erin, great catch, thank you! will change it, have a good day

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