Lucky Being Unlucky

[ontariolightning]

Hey, looking for any critique, comments, suggestions, tyLucky Being UnluckyWritten by Aaron Authier Copyright 2008CountryI was an hour late for my shift at workThe roads were crazy but the boss was a jerkSo he told me to clean my locker and get outLater when I was watchin' the six o'clock newsThey showed my old work with a car crashing throughAnd some of my friends bein' air lifted outOh I guess I'mLucky Being UnluckyI'm still standing here and ain't that somethingIt's mysterious and I've tried to make sense of ItBut I don't believe In destinyAnd I don't think It's god messing with meI must be, Lucky Being UnluckyI was out driving one night goin' to the barAfter my girlfriend dumped me ' broke my heartI thought she was going to be the oneWhen I got there I met this girl and we hit It offNow the memory of my ex girlfriends goneAnd this feels like the forever kind of loveOh I guess I'mLucky Being UnluckyShe's still standing here and ain't that somethingIt's mysterious and I've tried to make sense of ItBut I don't believe In destinyAnd I don't think It's god messing with meI must be, Lucky Being UnluckyI'll never win the lottery, never become a millionaireI'll never be that guy who gets to live his dreamsBut I don't care, It's a hell of a lot better beingLucky Being UnluckyI'm still standing here and ain't that somethingIt's mysterious and I've tried to make sense of ItBut I don't believe In destinyAnd I don't think It's god messing with meI must be, Lucky Being UnluckyYeah I must beLucky Being Unluc

[momof4]

well, not much to say but that i like it! my only teency tiny suggestion that may be a load of crap is that maybe the verses are too wordy...any chance you could shorten the sentences some, take some unnecessary words out? just a thought, but i still like it as is. when can we hear some of these "AA" songs? i'm sure looking forward to it!erin

[ontariolightning]

Hey Erin, sorry I just rewrote a lot of it, thanks for telling me its too wordy, yeah I will see what I can do about that, I've got some demos in the works so in a month or two, thanks for postingLucky Being UnluckyWritten by Aaron Authier Copyright 2008CountryI was an hour late for my shift at workThe roads were crazy but the boss was a jerkSo he told me to clean my locker and get outLater when I was watchin' the six o'clock newsThey showed my old work with a car crashing throughAnd some of my friends bein' air lifted outOh I guess I'mLucky Being UnluckyI'm still standing here and ain't that somethingIt's mysterious, I've tried to make sense of ItBut I don't believe In destinySo I must be, Lucky Being UnluckyI was out driving one night goin' to the barAfter my girlfriend cheated on me ' broke my heartI thought she was going to be the oneWhen I got there I met this girl and we hit It offNow the memory of my ex girlfriends goneAnd this feels like the forever kind of loveOh I guess I'mLucky Being UnluckyShe's still standing here and ain't that somethingIt's mysterious, I've tried to make sense of ItBut I don't believe In destinySo I must be, Lucky Being UnluckyI've tried to win the lotteryAnd I've tried chasing my dreamsThose things never worked out for meBut now I've got my own familyOh yeah I must beLucky Being UnluckyThey're still standing here and ain't that somethingIt's mysterious, I've tried to make sense of ItBut I don't believe In destinySo I must be, Lucky Being UnluckyYeah I must beLucky Being Unlucky

[lqrose]

Hi Aaron,I am always intrigued by your titles and hooks...I'm anxious to hear some of them to music as well ; )My 2 cents....and you know you can ignore it too....I was an hour late for my shift at workThe roads were crazy (and) but the boss was a jerkSo he told me to clean my locker and get outLater when I was watchin' the six o'clock newsThey showed that old (Diner, Wal Mart, Wendy's etc.) with a car crashing throughI get lost trying to imagine 'WHERE you were working and why you'd need to be air lifted? instead of carried out on stretchers? They showed my old work with a car crashing throughAnd some of my friends bein' air lifted outOh I guess I'mLucky Being UnluckyShe's still standing here and ain't that somethingIt's a mystery, and I can't make sense of it(does that "sing" better?It's mysterious, I've tried to make sense of ItBut I don't believe In destinySo I must be, Lucky Being UnluckyIt's a goodun' IMHO Good luck....Lqrose

[ontariolightning]

hi lqrose, I wasn't at work when that happened because the boss fired meMy friends and co workers were being airlifted out, I think it's clear, of course this never happened to me, just the character in the storyI kinda wanted mysterious and make sense of it to be a near rhymeThank you for your opinion though I will go through it againto make sure it is as clear as It can be