Because You're With Me

[jimd484827]

here's the lyric to a song I wrote for my son's wedding coming up in June. comments?the sound of your namethe taste of your lipsthe brightness of your sweet smilethat I can't resistall that you areand all that you domakes all the differenceit's what makes me love youyour voice is like music to my tired earsyour laughter revives mewhen I'm close to tearsnow and foreverthrough whatever will beI always know that I'll survivebecause you're with mewhen my back's against the wall,you make me feel ten feet tallagainthe love in your eyes, as big as a clear blue sky, lifts me up when I start to fallyou're hair is like silkyour hands soft and warmand when you touch meyou calm the stormfor all that I amyou're all that I needand I always know that I'll survivebecause you're with me

[hummingbird]

I think it's a lovely wedding-song lyric. No nits.

[lwj001]

Howdy jimd484827. Here's a few suggestions. May be too structured though:Because You're With MeThe sound of your name =5The taste of your lips =5Your smile is like the brightest flame =8That I can't resist =5And all that you are =5And all that you do =5Makes all the diff'rence in life's game =8They're the things that make me love you =8Your voice is like music =6Here in my tired ears =5Your laughter revives me =6When I'm close to tears =5So, now and forever =6Whatever will be =5I know that I'll survive =6Because you're with me =5When my back's against the wall =7You make me feel ten feet tall =7The love I see in your eyes =7As big as the clear blue skies =7Lifts me when I start to fall =7Your hair is like silk =5Your hands, soft and warm =5And when you touch me =5Dear, you calm the storm =5For all that I am =5You're all that I need =5I know I'll survive =5Because you're with me =5

[jimd484827]

Thanks for the comments and suggestions. I am new to the boards, and I would like to post the link to the recording I did of this so you can see where I was going with it. Can someone help? Thanks