"Field of Emotions" - any comments

[daffsongwriter]

Emotions Run Deep, Deep In The HeartThen Your Mind, Takes OverBefore You Know Where You AreA Conclusion Is DrawnCould Be Right Yeah, Could Be WrongThere’s A Field Of EmotionsIve Been Lied On, Ive Been Cried OnIve Been Laughed On, And Ive Been Relied OnSo Lay Down On Me And We’ll Go Into My Field Of EmotionsCrowded Places, Emotions Run WildOn A Train, Mind WandersLeaving The World Behind YouSail Away With A DreamAnd Take It With, Your JourneyAlong A Track Of Emotions(Guitar solo)Got Stuck In Here, Stayed In A RutWanna Get Out, And SeeHollywoods Big City StreetsI Just Need A BreakGive Me A Chance, And Believe In MeFor A New Wild EmotionChorusSometimes I Feel So, Down I Could CryI Just Wanna, Break FreeHolidays Are Short Lived CuresWhat Can I Turn ToEscape To Music, I DoIt’s Part Of My EmotionChrous

[lwj001]

http://www.pic-a-pagediscounts.com/Real ... ics.htmlHi daffsongwriter. Here's my tweaks to your song:Emotions Run Deep, Deep In The HeartThen Your Mind, Takes OverBefore You Know Where You AreA Conclusion Is DrawnCould Be Right Yeah, Could Be WrongThere’s A Field Of Emotions (In a field of emotions) (agrees with "where you are")Ive Been Lied On, Ive Been Cried On ("On is consistent but not accurate") (Lied to)Ive Been Laughed On, And Ive Been Relied On (laughed at)So Lay Down On Me And (this "On" still matches "cried on' and "relied on")We’ll Go Into My Field Of EmotionsCrowded Places, Emotions Run WildOn A Train, Mind Wanders (like a child)Leaving The World Behind YouSail Away With A DreamAnd Take It With, Your JourneyAlong A Track Of Emotions(Guitar solo)Got Stuck In Here, Stayed In A RutWanna Get Out, And SeeHollywoods Big City StreetsI Just Need A BreakGive Me A Chance, And Believe In MeFor A New Wild EmotionChorusSometimes I Feel So, Down I Could CryI Just Wanna, Break Free (or I'll die)Holidays Are Short Lived CuresWhat Can I Turn ToEscape To Music, I DoIt’s Part Of My EmotionChrous

[daffsongwriter]

Hi there, that does sound/flows better, thank you so much for your suggestions, I see what you mean about the cried on, laughed on etc, your right, sometimes it isn't till someone else highlights something that sticks out.Thanks again hun I appreciate it. It's a good forum this isn't it, I have a forum on my website but I dont get any other songwriters posting on it so glad I found this.Lv Daff xx