This Heart Of Mine

[lwj001]

I was feeling sorry for myself and crying in my beer. So here!This Heart Of Mine (08/21/2006) (song#4002)This heart of mine will never mendUntil I find true love, and thenIt will take some time, I know that it's trueFor this heart of mine to get over youOur love was a song that I thought would never endBut something went wrong that I can't comprehend I gave you my heart and my everythingYou tore it apart and broke every stringThis heart of mine will never mendUntil I find true love, and thenIt will take some time, I know that it's trueFor this heart of mine to get over youI sit here alone with my memoriesThinking of you as free as the breezeThis heart of mine cries but nobody hearsThough here in my eyes are nothing but tearsThis heart of mine will never mendUntil I find true love, and thenIt will take some time, I know that it's trueFor this heart of mine to get over you

[bitwhys]

<insert needless and gratuitious nicety here>"comprehend"always struck me as a rather lofty word for pop but that's probably just me. I suppose it depends on the tune."I gave you my heart and my everythingYou tore it apart and broke every string"mixed metaphor"This heart of mine cries but nobody hearsThough here in my eyes are nothing but tears""Though" is extraneous. "And" fits better.hope you're feeling better soon. good to hear you're keeping your liquids up.

[lwj001]

Thanks BitWhys for your appraisal. Darn, it took me 30 minutes to write that song (write 'em in my head while cruising to work) and I picked "Though" instead of "And". How careless! But you're right. The "tears-in-eyes" are just an addition to the same sorry state of my crying heart. So, I'll make that change to "And". Oh, yes I feel so much better now. Even the Lone Star beer is better (a little saltier).

[horacejesse]

You are stringing statements together without images. There isn't an actual image in the song. In my opinion this piece will not work as it is. Imagery is central to good lyrics. The title is very cliched, as is any talk of "hearts mending."Strong emotions are not necessarily conveyed in a song simply by stating them. Anyone can do that.Get to work.