Introduction

[drshush]

Hey everyone... thought I should bring something to the party now that I'm here... this is a piece I wrote a couple of years ago, though it hasn't really seen the light of day yet...Any feedback would be much appreciated/reciprocated.*ahem*An unfortunate past.Drafted to war an then caught in a blast.Divorced from a cautionless path,Forced him abroad and then tore him apart.What happens to a poor mothers heartwhen she finds out her boy's been quartered and halvedin a park and its plastered in corpses and carcasses,Bastards who started it talk it up large.A war against lies.In such a case do ethics even apply?A world where the guilty continue to thrive,If life's a tragedy is it tragic to die?To give up the sunlight the moonlight the rain,To lay down to sleep knowing you wont rise again?A slip an I'm slain.Listen again as I whisper my name...A slip an Im slain.Listen again as I whisper my name..Damned if you do. Damned if you don't.Damned if you try to do neither or both.Bleed in the throat when you squeeze it an choke,and you plead an you hope that the rope isn't broke,And it does and you fall. S*** what a mess.Who would a thought you can f*** up your death?Might as well. You f***ed up the rest,F***ed it with smoking and drinking and sex,Some o those bad times n sometimes the best.God bless this whiskey, bless these cigarettes.I know you understand though cant explain,What could drive me to lengths as to finish the gameStill its the same, sinister stain.Twist of the veins with a trickle o pain...A slip an I'm slain.Listen again as I whisper my name...A slip an I'm slain.Listen again as I whisper my name...Actually now that I look at it it's a bit sombre isn't it?I wonder if I should've chosen that for an introduction...

[djdeweese]

I'd say sombre is an understatement! More grim, perhaps bordering on macabre. Then again, these are weighty subject matters, and there are certainly genres of music where this kind of directness is appropriate. (Songs like "The Rooster" by Alice in Chains come to mind.) I couldn't find a link to your music, so I don't know what style you're pursuing. Just my two cents--