Dear friends of music, I need your help with my new song!

[TimbreStar]

Dear Music friends,

I am new to this forum, and I'm not sure if this is the right place to submit new song for reviews and opinions?

I have made a new song and I was wondering what would be your opinions about it...
Here is the page where you can play the song.. It's called Rainbow Smile

http://www.timbrestar.com/TimbreStar/Song_Recipes.html

My question are;

+ Does it sound professional? If now why?
+ What's missing or what's too much?
+ I am a songwriter/producer not vocalist so I know vocals are weak side of the song and I'm looking for collaborations on that side but I still want to hear your opinion about it?
+ Would you pay for this song? What does it need for it to be successful?

I am open to all ideas and recommendations.. I would appreciate your help...

Thank you very much,

TimbreStar ~ I live for a better world and I'm after the missing note.
http://www.TimbreStar.com

[eeoo]

Howdy! I dig the groove and would love to hear a live band play it. Wasn't crazy about the drums, mostly because it would sound so good with a live drummer. I actually like the tone of your voice, i know it was heavily auto tuned but you do have an instrument there, don't sell yourself short. To me it sounds like a first draft, but a solid place to build from. Good luck! eo.

[TimbreStar]

Howdy! I dig the groove and would love to hear a live band play it. Wasn't crazy about the drums, mostly because it would sound so good with a live drummer. I actually like the tone of your voice, i know it was heavily auto tuned but you do have an instrument there, don't sell yourself short. To me it sounds like a first draft, but a solid place to build from. Good luck! eo.

Thank you very much eo I totally agree with you on live instruments and band playing it. Actually when I play it on acoustic guitar it has more magic to it. I'm pulling the day to record it with live instruments with a band... Actually as English isn't my native language, I always wondered how does my English sound to English speaking people... It's good to know you liked it, made me happy Thanks!

[billg1]

Your English is fine (better than mine)

I like this! Even if it wasn't a totally live band, just a couple of real instruments would really make this a stand out track. It's just one of those groovy kind of songs that crys out for some real elements. Good job!

[TimbreStar]

Your English is fine (better than mine)

I like this! Even if it wasn't a totally live band, just a couple of real instruments would really make this a stand out track. It's just one of those groovy kind of songs that crys out for some real elements. Good job!

Thank you for your kind words Bill made my day... I was thinking of recording acoutic guitar as a live intrument at least, just to give it more groove, depth and life.. And may be get a real hammond organ play its part as my friend has it.. I'm starting to think analog is better than digital and live is better than programming... It has more life and groove.. Even the mistakes that you do adds a feeling to the song.. And at the end how good can it be if you are sitting in front of computer whilst on the other hand you transfer your feelings throgh a real instrument... I think thats hy music was much more magical in the old days... Thank you again!

[glender]

I thought it had a nice groove, I stuck around and listened to the whole song, I was curious to see if it had a bridge and it did! I liked the rapping. I couldn't pull out the lyrics but I'm just listening on my laptop right now,Sorry it's 6:00am here. (Always best to post the lyrics for a full critique) I don't know if it has enough slam for an A/C artist but I think it could find a home in TV/Movie. The genre feels like A/C more than anything else to me. All in all i liked it, it was catchy. gl

[TimbreStar]

I thought it had a nice groove, I stuck around and listened to the whole song, I was curious to see if it had a bridge and it did! I liked the rapping. I couldn't pull out the lyrics but I'm just listening on my laptop right now,Sorry it's 6:00am here. (Always best to post the lyrics for a full critique) I don't know if it has enough slam for an A/C artist but I think it could find a home in TV/Movie. The genre feels like A/C more than anything else to me. All in all i liked it, it was catchy. gl

Hi Glender, thank you so much specially taking your time to listen at 6am Sorry, I don;t know much about genres, What is A/C?
I have updated the player on my website so it's much easier to find the lyrics now, hopefully... thanks!

[DorothyWallace]

I like the song a lot. I think your vocals are good. Why do you think you're not a vocalist?

Dorothy

[ottlukk]

Timbre:
When I clicked your link, I kept on waiting for the song to play. Took me a couple of minutes to notice the little box I had to click on; not familiar with this site. First of all, the intro, at 34 seconds, is too long. Secondly, at least on my computer, everything came through on my left earpiece. Third, I had trouble hearing the lyrics, they need to be more up front.
Liked it, though. Nice vibe and groove, and the lyrics i was able to hear, I liked. The rap type of sequence near the end was a nice variation.
Ott

[grandsoul]

Intro too long. Done by too many people.
WOrds been done before.

Don't write music for someone to be sorry for you.
A lot of overtones of things that generally hit the reject pile.
Need to make things much bolder.

Grandsoul

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