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I rebuilt this song and would like your feedback.http://www.taxi.com/lemoine Getting away from live drum w/mics. How is the mix,vocals,instr and such????????????? RICHES TO RAGS BLUES http://www.taxi.com/lemoine Riches to Rags Blues

Back in the swampland, not so long ago. Deep in the backwaters, near the Gulf of Mexico. Chorous Put you back in the bayou, ain't nobody gonna know. Love sick Riches to Rags Blues I ain't never gonna see my baby blues. Love sick Riches to Rags Blues I ain't never gonna see my baby blues I woke up one mornin, everything was gone all I got is this heartake and the words to this song. Chorous--Lead bridge-- Snakes and snails and puppy dog tails Truely a witches brew Snakes and snails and puppy dog tails I still love you Snakes and snails and puppy dog tails Which one are you They're gonna string me up If they ever find you. Sleepin with thew gators and the snakes and snails too Chorous----Chorous

[remmet]

Hi LeMoine. First, thanks for your generous comments on Emerging World. Much appreciated.

I opened your link(s) but didn't see that song listed. Can you provide a link?

Thanks.

Richard

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Richard, I have been trying to put that song in for 3hrs but taxi is being STUPID at the moment

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It should work now, taxi fixed the up load

[ottlukk]

LeMoine:
Went to your TAXI link, where'd you get that 23 year old wife? Just kidding (and a bit envious), I note that you listened to my stuff and asked that I listen to yours. Gotta admit, I cringed at the thought of critiquing someone who'd payed me a compliment -- but you listened to mine, so why shouldn't I listen to yours?
Not a lot of genuine blues on this board, but this song is really, really HOT! "snakes & snails, puppy dog tails . . . a witche's brew". The lyrics were great, the singing was great, the attitude was great. This is a tune where I say, "Why the hell didn't I come up with that?"
Welcome to the forums, you got more stuff like this, you'll do great.
Ott

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outtlukk.....Thanks very much..Your review made my day. It was the trueth from you and remmet that made me dig deeper in my recording to try to make it better. Again THANKS

[remmet]

Hi LeMoine,

There are things I really like about this song - your voice, the "attitude", the lyrics. You've hit most of the key elements that make a strong and interesting song. But I think the production gets in the way. Here's what I heard:

Your voice sounds like it's coming from an underwater cavern. The power and directness that I'm sure your voice conveys has gotten lost in that boomy, echoey environment.

The drums also sound weak and lack the impact and presence they should have.

Finally, the recurring 3-note guitar lick is too loud and way too repetitive (just my opinion). It even continues through the instrumental break. I think you can afford to cut back on that particular riff, lower the volume, and add some other variations. It would help keep the song interesting and fresh and cut down on your listeners' ear fatigue.

I don't know the circumstances of how you recorded this song, but I think it's good enough to justify re-recording it in a professional studio. Knowing - through Taxi - how high the bar is for songs, it would be worth the effort and cost to get the best recording possible.

You have an authentic and unique style, LeMoine. I'd love to hear how far you can take it.

Best,

Richard

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Thanks Richard, I agree with your review and only wish I had any money for pro studio....This was my 1st try with effects on vocals, I've always done every thing raw and from the heart but I think it's time to use my brain as well as my heart........................Thanks again for the truth.......

Hi LeMoine,

There are things I really like about this song - your voice, the "attitude", the lyrics. You've hit most of the key elements that make a strong and interesting song. But I think the production gets in the way. Here's what I heard:

Your voice sounds like it's coming from an underwater cavern. The power and directness that I'm sure your voice conveys has gotten lost in that boomy, echoey environment.

The drums also sound weak and lack the impact and presence they should have.

Finally, the recurring 3-note guitar lick is too loud and way too repetitive (just my opinion). It even continues through the instrumental break. I think you can afford to cut back on that particular riff, lower the volume, and add some other variations. It would help keep the song interesting and fresh and cut down on your listeners' ear fatigue.

I don't know the circumstances of how you recorded this song, but I think it's good enough to justify re-recording it in a professional studio. Knowing - through Taxi - how high the bar is for songs, it would be worth the effort and cost to get the best recording possible.

You have an authentic and unique style, LeMoine. I'd love to hear how far you can take it.

Best,

Richard

Thanks

[jefflaplante]

Again, really cool track from you. You have a knack for writing really interesting songs. And you can play the hell out of that axe. I agree with the others about the production. The drums were kind of weak...what are you using? Also, the vocs could lose that caverness effect...dry and raspy would be better...add a touch of room reverb and you will be all set. When it comes to effects on vocs, often times... less is more.

You should watch your timing on those guitar licks. I often have to turn my drums way up when recording, so I am sure that I am locked in to the beat. Right now, it seems like the guitar riffs are rushing ahead of the beat a little.

Overall, an excellent song. You should really try hard to get the mix and timing down because this one deserves it.

BTW, I listened to your Talkin Money/Monkey (can't remember) again and it really sounds a lot better than I remember. Did you change it up?

-Jeff

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Thanks very much jeff , This was the 1st time I used effects on vocals, I usally run raw and from the heart. Now it's time to use more brain with heart....Your problally right about turn up the drums while playing guit...Oh, this was also the 1st shot with DM5 drum triggers, I'm still working on it..Thanks again

Again, really cool track from you. You have a knack for writing really interesting songs. And you can play the hell out of that axe. I agree with the others about the production. The drums were kind of weak...what are you using? Also, the vocs could lose that caverness effect...dry and raspy would be better...add a touch of room reverb and you will be all set. When it comes to effects on vocs, often times... less is more.

You should watch your timing on those guitar licks. I often have to turn my drums way up when recording, so I am sure that I am locked in to the beat. Right now, it seems like the guitar riffs are rushing ahead of the beat a little.

Overall, an excellent song. You should really try hard to get the mix and timing down because this one deserves it.

BTW, I listened to your Talkin Money/Monkey (can't remember) again and it really sounds a lot better than I remember. Did you change it up?

-Jeff