new member's first upload; feedback appreciated

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Re: new member's first upload; feedback appreciated

Post by marcblack30 » Mon Apr 26, 2010 8:46 pm

Sounds good, it's just beggin for lyrics!
The chorus hit and I started singing Maggie May. :D
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Re: new member's first upload; feedback appreciated

Post by Hookjaw Brown » Mon Apr 26, 2010 9:06 pm

I found the snare on the intro distracting. IMHO I would not use it. Also the intro should be cut in half. I do like the snare in the break with the electric guitar, it blends well. I would also cut the song down to two minutes, it gets a bit repetitious without melody lines or vocals. You could also lengthen the bridge part X2, it was interesting and could be told again.

Instrumentals can be short, 1 to 2 minutes. Say what needs saying and end it.
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