Till Next Year (Christmas song)

[Kolstad]

Any comments on this? Goal is licensing for tv/film.
I need to take down the bass a db or two, and my vocals is just a scratch at this point. I basically need the lyrics and music bed to be in great shape.

Thanks to Dottie & Walt Lamberg for inputs to rewrite the lyric..
Also wonder if the change in time works for the second verse in context of the rest of the lyric, or I need to change it to consistantly be in past tense?

Till Next Year
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(C) 2010 Magne Kolstad

Till Next Year

He's been travellin' round the world
Reached all hearts in one flight
Made everybody jolly
Put smiles on our faces

All we can give back now
Is our blessings and grace

See you again next year
Thank you for this Christmas
Thanks for making wishes and dreams come true
Now while Santa rests, we can say thanks to Christmas land
And till next year

Does he light up the fire and rest his feet?
Does his children play like everyone else's?
Do they greet and celebrate
And spend family time?

Does Christmas mean as much to them
As it means in our lives?

See you again next year
Thank you for this Christmas
Thanks for making wishes and dreams come true
Now while Santa rests, we can say thanks to Christmas land
And till next year

Did he dream of a white Christmas
An’ kissed 'neath the Misteltoe?
Did he have fun with Rudolph?
Did he sing Christmas carols?

Oh we hope that he enjoyed it
as much as we did

See you again next year
Thank you for this Christmas
Thanks for making wishes and dreams come true
Now while Santa rests, we can say thanks to Christmas land
And till next year

Oh till next year
Santa's coming back
Next Year

[Kolstad]

Working on finalizing the mix & lyrics..

Lowered my vocals 1db as well as 1/2db of bass. Didn't fix the out of pitch backing vox, as it's just an example I did for the singer.
I consider changing last part of the chorus to something a la:

Now while Santa rests, we can give thanks to Christmas land
and say till next year
or
goodbye till next year

I'd like the word "give" in there, and it's sort of a goodbye to christmas song, for this year

Just juggling ideas with myself.. maybe it's good as is?

[feaker66]

Magne

Serious and pretty, I like that.

Kinda want to sway along with it.

Chorus is very good. "See ya again next year" sticks.

Your vox is not quite as clean in the mix. Got some frequencies fighting.

Not flowing as well at "put smiles" and "for this Christmas" (being real picky here).

I think after all the tweaking, this is going to be "pretty" darn good.

Really like this.

Sincerely

Paul

[Kolstad]

Thanks Paul,

Actually I doubled my vocals, and tripled them for the chorus. Maybe wasn't a great idea, but I'm experimenting with getting a vocal sound that makes me sound good. Probably impossible. I just can't get it right. I don't have a lot of vocal chops, and everything comes out sounding the same, to me. I need vocal coaching, and will take some lessons next year.

But in the end, it's not for me to sing. I'm glad the track works pretty good for you at this point. Gotta know my limitations, and my vocals just don't cut it with the production I'm able to do at this point.

So it's all about the song

[waltl]

Magne,

I recommend that you stick to past tense in all the verses. Two nitpicks. The second Does should be Do (the children do play). Greet is normally a transitive verb so it needs an object.

How about -- Do they greet their neighbors OR Do they send out warm greetings.

Does he light up the fire and rest his feet?
Does his children play like everyone else's?
Do they greet and celebrate
And spend family time?

Walt