Perplexed am I, # 332

singer1 · Post by **singer1** » Mon Jul 02, 2012 10:33 am

I am, to say the least, perplexed at the return and reasoning for it #332. The song submitted, " Everything's Faded Away", has been described as ' an emotional rollercoaster ' and 'deep, emotionally' . Your response leads me to believe this is not the case, in your opinion. If you missed the struggle and emotion in this piece, I am at a loss for words.
While your response showed that YOU'VE read the description for this opportunity, it in no way demonstrated you've listened to the song submitted. Perplexed am I... D.B.

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CrimsnSyrn · Post by **CrimsnSyrn** » Mon Jul 02, 2012 10:41 am

Hi Dave,

Was wondering what was the listing that you submitted this to?

Juliet

singer1 · Post by **singer1** » Mon Jul 02, 2012 12:11 pm

Here's the listing; song is on my Taxi home page. D.B.
A-LIST MUSIC LICENSING COMPANY U-R-G-E-N-T-L-Y needs a DOWN-to-MID-TEMPO ROCK SONG for a MOVIE TRAILER. They're looking for an EPIC and EMOTIONAL ROCK SONG that BUILDS in INTENSITY like Aerosmith's "Dream On" or The Rolling Stones' "Gimme Shelter."Ê Your SONG should be EMOTIONAL and DRAMATIC while being MANLY and GRITTY at its core. MALE vocals only please. Your SONG should convey a sense of STRENGTH and have a lyric theme that speaks to OVERCOMING STRUGGLE or RISING TO THE OCCASION, or EMERGING FROM THE DARKNESS. They are NOT looking for SONGS that are too light, fun or happy. Love songs and conspicuously religious songs will also NOT work.Ê Lyrics must be PG-rated. Songs must sound CONTEMPORARY and CURRENT or have a TIMELESS SOUND that will work well in a contemporary setting like the reference tracks. Your PERFORMANCES must be STRONG.Ê It's IMPORTANT that your SONG sounds like an ARTIST/BAND and NOT like a production music library track. NO SAMPLES of other songs or artists can be incorporated into your track.

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Casey H · Post by **Casey H** » Mon Jul 02, 2012 12:24 pm

Please post the exact words #332 used on the return.

BTW, I've found #332 to be one of the best and very film/TV knowledgable.

Casey

singer1 · Post by **singer1** » Mon Jul 02, 2012 12:49 pm

Hey Casey; here's the review. I've also found #332 to be very good; hence the confusion. Checked boxes are - Stylistically off Target & Lyrics.

Stylistically Off Target
Music
Lyrics
Other

" Your SONG should be EMOTIONAL and DRAMATIC while being MANLY and GRITTY at its core. Your SONG should convey a sense of STRENGTH and have a lyric theme that speaks to OVERCOMING STRUGGLE or RISING TO THE OCCASION, or EMERGING FROM THE DARKNESS. "

That's it. Talking to Jerry Jennings, (co-writer). He came up with something interesting. He said at a road rally Robin said what certain adjectives mean to them vs. us. Like swagger did not mean what we would normally think of. A Taxi T.V. episode on how to understand the terminology that the screeners use might be helpful.
Oh, thanks for chiming in on this. I figure you are the man when it comes to a general understanding of all things Taxi. D.B.

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CrimsnSyrn · Post by **CrimsnSyrn** » Mon Jul 02, 2012 1:17 pm

Hi Dave,

I really like your song - really beautiful.
I'm no expert on understanding listings, but I think I'm getting better at it. And if I were to venture a guess as to why this was a return, I would look at a this line in the listing:

"Your SONG should convey a sense of STRENGTH and have a lyric theme that speaks to OVERCOMING STRUGGLE or RISING TO THE OCCASION, or EMERGING FROM THE DARKNESS"

On first listen, without having your lyrics to read, it seems to me your song is about losing love - and doesn't seem to convey a sense of strength - on the contrary, to me IMHO it seems to convey a sense of hopelessness.

Your lyrics:

"I'm all alone
I can't see tomorrow"

You do have the line "everything's faded away" which could be interpreted as "emerging from the darkness" however, in the context in which you use it (preceded by "I can't see tomorrow") to me, it feels sorrowful.

It also seems like your song is a love song, or sung specifically to someone you lost - and the listing said "Love songs and conspicuously religious songs will also NOT work."

One other comment, is that (let me reiterate - I really like your song - it's beautiful!), I can't say it really built in intensity, which was also something the listing requested.

That's just my in-the-process-of-being-educated guess.

I make myself read the listings at least three times if I have a pre-written song that I want to submit, and if I'm writing a song for submission, I try to come back to the listing several times while in the process of writing it to make sure I'm hitting all the marks. Hopefully I'm getting closer.

It's a fantastic song, and I'm sure it'll find a home sooner or later!

Best of luck in all you do,

Juliet

Casey H · Post by **Casey H** » Mon Jul 02, 2012 7:58 pm

I think Juliet nailed it pretty well. Lyrically it seems to be about lost love, no emerging from the darkness. And emotionally, it's very even-keeled, no build in intensity.

Think of the intensitity, build, and grit in Aerosmith's "Dream On" which they referenced. Then compare your song (which is good, BTW)...

It's a good song, just not on target for the listing. Accusing #332 of not even listening was way out of line.

Best
Casey

singer1 · Post by **singer1** » Tue Jul 03, 2012 8:18 am

Thanks again for the listen both of you. Yes Casey, Juliet has it pretty well nailed! I also like her take on reading listings at least three times; thought I had done that, guess not. Thanks to both of you again. Hey casey, I'm tryin!! Getting a grip on the lyrical end. Not easy, but worth every minute of attention. Thank you for shoving me into better habits man. LOve you for that. D.B.

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singer1 · Post by **singer1** » Tue Jul 03, 2012 12:14 pm

Well at least he, or she just hates all my vocal performances. Same screener, same result. It seems I do not convey enough emotion in my vocals. As a vocalist I've been told the exact opposite, by everyone! I guess 20 some odd years as a vocalist is all for not. I guess I'll work on my kazoo skills. Maybe I can whistle...with emotion... D.B.
P.S. - 'Silent Night ' cover returned. What Taxi means by' try something out of the box', is DON'T YOU DARE TRY SOMETHING THATS NOT TRIED AND TRUE. It's good to know that innovation here in America IS DEAD. Let's be like everyone else. Individuality is for people that have already made a name for themselves. Let's try and remember that why we liked them in the first place. They did not fit the moldy mold, they made their own.

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ShadowaterMusic · Post by **ShadowaterMusic** » Tue Jul 03, 2012 1:03 pm

Have you considered starting a personal journal? You might be better off venting there, just saying.

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