Coffee Shop In Heaven...Still brewing.

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Re: Coffee Shop In Heaven...Still brewing.

Post by vincent » Tue Apr 23, 2013 12:07 pm

Hi Tom, lyrics look good to me, you write far more complete than I do, know what I mean? more to your lyrics. I can`t find this to listen.

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Re: Coffee Shop In Heaven...Still brewing.

Post by songmaster » Wed Apr 24, 2013 7:52 am

Hi Vincent Thank you for taking a look at this one. I did put up a demo of the song, but it was so poorly done that I took it off. I might revisit this song down the road but at the moment I am concentrating on writing for film and tv. With me, the next song is always the best one.

Anyways thanks again

Tom

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Re: Coffee Shop In Heaven...Still brewing.

Post by vincent » Wed Apr 24, 2013 10:26 am

Hi Tom, hey you should hear me...lol that writing for film/TV sounds like work. I have enough trouble just doing it for fun. I have the song you and I about where I want it now, the next song I have in the fire, I`m really taking a beating over..no rhyme, some say metaphors. But the damn thing sounds good I hate to throw it out...lol and its a piece out of life I promised I would finish.

Good luck with all your doing, I kept that line you gave me hope thats ok.

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Re: Coffee Shop In Heaven...Still brewing.

Post by LooknGlass » Wed Apr 24, 2013 6:19 pm

This is a good write that I can relate to. If I knew what kind of melody you had in mind I could critique a little better. Except for a couple unnecessary words I think you could do without (imo only) this is not bad at all and probably will have an even better feel with music. Good job.
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Re: Coffee Shop In Heaven...Still brewing.

Post by songmaster » Thu Apr 25, 2013 7:41 am

Thanks Vincent and Looking Glass, I do have a melody for it but at this point I'm thinking it might be dated. Also, Vincent, any line I gave you, you can keep or throw away, no problem what so ever. I hope it was a help. If I didn't get help with my lyrics on the forum, I would be up a creek without a paddle.

Thanks again for you interest.

Tom

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