Under a Wave [deleted]

[vincent]

re-writing

[nylyrics]

Vincent:

Well the lyrics to me are a little confusing to me - first talking to someone and then about someone the you to her thing.

Some of the lyrics are good images like the bridge.

And FOR SURE the image and title of just like falling under a wave is very unique and memorable to me.

I would work from the title back - be clear on the point of view of the singer - whos talking to who - and be clear on one single song point and emotion.

Good luck.

Andy

[vincent]

thank you Andy for commenting, I really didn`t like the first verse so I`ll start with that. I guess i`ll just re-write the verse...like I put some sound on this too, so you can hear the verse.

[re-writing]