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Hottie Tottie

Post by LooknGlass » Sat Jul 27, 2013 11:24 am

After writing this, I was wondering if I spelled "Hottie Tottie" correctly. I noticed that Usher had a song called "Hot Tottie" out. I have never heard of this (and still haven't listened to it) but this lyric bears no resemblance nor was inspired by Ushers title at all. I am definitely not a rap or Usher fan...*Yuck*.....Critiques and suggestions would be welcomed.


Hottie Tottie


(Vs.1)
She's got somethin I've got to have
I've had it before but not like that
She's so special she puts special to shame
She's out of the park and a new ball game

(Chorus)
She's a hot tottie in the Mexican sun
A Latin beauty with sultry skin
A hot tottie drowning men with her eyes
luring them in with a sensuous grin

What a tottie
Hottie Tottie

(Vs.2)
A white bikini with laces at the hips
I don't know if I can handle this
She takes voluptuous to dizzying heights
Not only striking but so pretty it bites

(Chorus)
She's a hot tottie in the Mexican sun
A Latin beauty with sultry skin
A hot tottie drowning men with her eyes
luring them in with a sensuous grin

What a tottie
Hottie Tottie

(Bridge)
My vacation
just got better
I'm going to walk to the shoreline
and I'm gonna get her
I'm going to ask her name
Buy her a drink or three
Dance in the moon light
then take her home with me

(Chorus)
That hot tottie in the Mexican sun
That Latin beauty with sultry skin
That hot tottie drowning men with her eyes
luring them in with a sensuous grin

(Chorus2)
Hottie tottie
Gonna make you mine
Hottie tottie
Oh you look so fine
Hottie tottie
You light a fire in me
Hottie tottie
On a Cancun beach
Hottie tottie
Hottie tottie


© L. James Tanner
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Re: Hottie Tottie

Post by melodymessiah » Mon Jul 29, 2013 3:50 pm

ha-ha, i could tell it was you just by the catchy title;-)

again very nice lyrics, i think you're one of the finest lyricists in here for sure. (if i remember correctly, i think i composed a song or two based on your lyrics a while back) however, i wonder if the (full) title also should appear in the BEGINNING of the chorus (hottie tottie instead of hot tottie). sort of expected that. but it might conflict with your melody.

and perhaps "She's out of the park WITH a new ball game"...?

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Re: Hottie Tottie

Post by mikeShort » Wed Jul 31, 2013 6:03 am

My favorite line is "She's so special she puts special to shame."
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Re: Hottie Tottie

Post by LooknGlass » Fri Aug 02, 2013 1:40 pm

melodymessiah wrote:ha-ha, i could tell it was you just by the catchy title;-)

again very nice lyrics, i think you're one of the finest lyricists in here for sure. (if i remember correctly, i think i composed a song or two based on your lyrics a while back) however, i wonder if the (full) title also should appear in the BEGINNING of the chorus (hottie tottie instead of hot tottie). sort of expected that. but it might conflict with your melody.

and perhaps "She's out of the park WITH a new ball game"...?
Thanks my friend, I appreciate the comment and compliment very much, but I feel small compared to the great writers in here. As for your suggestions, I will keep them in mind as I hone in on the lyric more in the coming days. I have been away awhile dealing with family issues and this was a first attempt at a lyric in over a month. I am contemplating your idea and melody for my other lyric that you PM'ed me about too.
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Re: Hottie Tottie

Post by LooknGlass » Fri Aug 02, 2013 1:43 pm

mikeShort wrote:My favorite line is "She's so special she puts special to shame."
Thanks for reading and commenting Mike. I have had that line stored away with my other one liners for a long time and finally thought I found a lyric for it. I must admit, I liked that one too.
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