Bounce this off of you for some feedback

[mrdtman]

I was working on a listing once for a hip hop cue for one of those reality show listings - think it was Ink or something like that they gave for a reference - anyway, didn't complete it on time but kind of liked it so I kept it, thought I can use for something later. Have been meaning to post it up here for some comments.

2 versions, 1 version w/o piano:
https://soundcloud.com/dtman-2/makeka-m ... v1/s-nxvT7

https://soundcloud.com/dtman-2/makeka-m ... v2/s-I2CW1

Would appreciate your thoughts.

DT

[cassmcentee]

Nice one Duane!
I'm not a Hip Hop guy so I'll leave mix comments for someone who is...
But it sure works for me as a Hip Hop Cue
Good work!
Cass

[burpo]

I'm no expert, but here are my impressions.

Good use of repeated motif.

Could use some pad swells, here and there, to add interest, propel things.

I could hear this in a network drama more than a reality show.

Good work, thus far!!

-b

[mrdtman]

Thanks guys!
Question - which version? Witth or without the piano?

DT

[burpo]

I vote piano in and out.

[mrdtman]

I vote piano in and out.

Thanks Burpo!

DT