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what's you all's thoughts on this?

Post by KBearden » Sat Feb 16, 2019 5:37 pm

looking to submit for a singer/songwriter listing....what are your thoughts on these words..i can't seem to put this to my guitar, thinking it should be a piano and vocal...still searching for the bridge and then repeat the second verse but was looking for some feedback.....know this is silly but Copy write Feb 16, 2019

you

pretty are the flowers
that dance within your eyes
subtle is the romance
from your Mona Lisa smile
when you touch me in the morning
my world explodes with life
the moon and stars will blush each night
as you lay by my side.....

being just a simple man
i wonder how it's true
to walk upon this worldly plane
hand in hand with you
to understand the greater things
that we all must do
fades away in your summer dress
as i gaze upon you

you....you....you..........................

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Re: what's you all's thoughts on this?

Post by SquareBiz » Thu Feb 28, 2019 8:19 am

I like the lyrics...the second verse sounds like it could be the chorus. Why repeat the second verse?

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