Blues instrumentals, S220329BN

[pveniot]

Hi Blues fans,
My pitch for this listing

https://soundcloud.com/pierre-veniot/moon-crush-blues

references are : Thrill is gone, Boom, Boom: You know!

Comments appreciated.

Peace...

Pierre

[Casey H]

Hi Pierre
I'm not hearing enough similarity to the reference tracks here. It strays too much from the standard blues formula. A/B listen to https://youtu.be/oica5jG7FpU (Thrill Is Gone).

Best
Casey

[Rolf]

hello Pierre, I like the almost Stormy Mondayish ending of the turnaround. The chromatic melody lines may not be the best fit for production music. And even it's a blues I wouldn't forget about the rule of thumb regarding the forward momentum (layering something new). Hope that helps. Greetings Rolf

[pveniot]

Hi Pierre
I'm not hearing enough similarity to the reference tracks here. It strays too much from the standard blues formula. A/B listen to https://youtu.be/oica5jG7FpU (Thrill Is Gone).

Best
Casey

This is a very standard blues progression, i don't see why it ''strays'' too much... i've been in a blues band for many years... we played Thrill is gone...
Last critique from Taxi, for a similar blues listing, did not mention anything about this not being a blues...

Thanks

[pveniot]

hello Pierre, I like the almost Stormy Mondayish ending of the turnaround. The chromatic melody lines may not be the best fit for production music. And even it's a blues I wouldn't forget about the rule of thumb regarding the forward momentum (layering something new). Hope that helps. Greetings Rolf

Thanks,
The ''theme'' comes in after the first pass, isn't that layering something new...
As for chromatism, I don't see why it's not a fit for production music...

Pierre

[Casey H]

Hi Pierre
I'm not hearing enough similarity to the reference tracks here. It strays too much from the standard blues formula. A/B listen to https://youtu.be/oica5jG7FpU (Thrill Is Gone).

Best
Casey

This is a very standard blues progression, i don't see why it ''strays'' too much... i've been in a blues band for many years... we played Thrill is gone...
Last critique from Taxi, for a similar blues listing, did not mention anything about this not being a blues...

Thanks

To clarify, you may have the chord progression but your descending lead line that comes in at 00:38 is what feels off to me as far as the references and more traditional blues lead licks. Listen to the lead lines in the ref track such as at around 1:40 ish.

[pveniot]

Hi Pierre
I'm not hearing enough similarity to the reference tracks here. It strays too much from the standard blues formula. A/B listen to https://youtu.be/oica5jG7FpU (Thrill Is Gone).

Best
Casey

This is a very standard blues progression, i don't see why it ''strays'' too much... i've been in a blues band for many years... we played Thrill is gone...
Last critique from Taxi, for a similar blues listing, did not mention anything about this not being a blues...

Thanks

To clarify, you may have the chord progression but your descending lead line that comes in at 00:38 is what feels off to me as far as the references and more traditional blues lead licks. Listen to the lead lines in the ref track such as at around 1:40 ish.

I see what you mean
Thanks