Another try at DRAMEDY

[irthlingz]

Somewhat calmer pizz strings - thanks to Casey!



Took mainly the "Sneaky Snitch" ref as our guide.

Version based on greatly appreciated feedback from Matt, Mark and Paulie!

https://soundcloud.com/user-171442525/t ... gz-4-14-22

Initial version:
https://soundcloud.com/user-171442525/t ... -irthlingz

Sharon & Michael

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[cosmicdolphin]

Whilst I think the arrangement has improved since the previous track due to being more consistent, the melody here just sounds like it was randomly generated.

I'm not a music theory guy but maybe someone who is can explain why it sounds so robotic, emotionless and random. I get no sense of any underlying chord progression or structure.

I'm not sure how you came up with the piece but you might want to reconsider your methodology.

Mark

[VanderBoegh]

Hey guys, I do think this piece has improved over your last dramedy piece, however, I'll ask you the same question I posed in your previous piece's discussion thread:

What mood were you aiming for? And do you think an average listener would be able to say, "ahhhh, that is clearly a ___ mood?". This is one of the most important questions you need to ask yourself every time you sit down to write music for TV. Always have a mood in mind, and stay laser-focused on nailing it. When I listen to this piece, I can't latch on to any emotion or mood, and again, this will pretty much kill the chances of getting music signed to libraries. Libraries want things to fit in predefined boxes. If they can't categorize it for easy searchability, it just won't make sense for them to sign it.

Also, as I mentioned previously, you'll want to address your reverb. Your orchestra still sounds like it's playing in an empty arena. Your reverb is HUGE, and should be much more intimate. And like I also mentioned previously, you tend to have different sonic spaces happening within the same piece. Notice how your orchestra sounds like it's in a different space than the cymbal, which almost sounds like the cymbal player or snare-tapper is sitting right across from you in a closet.

Lastly, can you imagine what the sheet music would look like for these poor pizzicato string players? It would be four bars of notes, followed by "repeat 100x". I'm sure these string players would want to jump off a bridge if they were real players. Gotta throw some variety in these phrases!! Octave up, octave down, strip out some notes, send the melody to a different section, drop it out completely, etc.

~~Matt

[irthlingz]

Once again, thank you, Mark and Matt! We appreciate your generous and expert assistance. We are learning ...

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Michael and Sharon

[Paulie]

Too complex... and I can't tell what key this is in. Really try to keep it simple. Check out my dramedy tutorial and pay specific attention to my melody/theme. Very simple, very basic. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tlGRHvuGdW0&t=59s

[irthlingz]

Thank you, Paulie!

[irthlingz]

New version now in first post. Let us know what you think, thank you again!

[Casey H]

Listening to latest version. That string plucking is WAY too piercing and would never work under dialog. Listen at very low volume. Can you imagine that under dialog? The best part of the track is the brass at 00:39. You may be better off basing the whole track on the brass playing the motif, throw away a lot of the rest, and just support it lightly. Caveat: I am not a cue guy, not a dramedy guy.

Best,
Casey

[irthlingz]

Listening to latest version. That string plucking is WAY too piercing and would never work under dialog.

Thank you, Casey! Putting up a new version (in first post) with calmer pizz sounds.

[Casey H]

I think it's just a poor choice of instrument even in the latest version. As I said before, the best part of the track is from 00:39-00:49. You may have something there. I'll let others with more cue experience chime in.