New tune "jump on a daydream" intro question

[feaker66]

I am only a few days out of carpal tunnel surgery, but I can still strum with my thumb.
song was a mutt and pulled

[XrashGates]

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[feaker66]

sounds ok

reminded of some sort of "Robin Hood" era mistral track straight of the bat

the lyrical story/theme seems disjointed and is a bit confusing to me about where your going with it

don't kinda get a clear sense of a verse, bridge, pre-chorus, chorus build up in the structure with the song

reads more like verse 1 verse 2 verse 3 verse 4 kinda of thing

its not a crime by any means but does feel sort of like its plateaued out

Hey crash. You are spot on in your critique. It is very difficult for me to get any feeling of how good or bad a track is. It's great to get feedback after a first take like this.
It will be a long time until I can make clean tracks in that I am getting the surgery on the other hand in a few weeks. Good news on the first in that the tingle and numb are gone. Old age is way overrated. Thanks for the listen and the help.