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[BradleyHagen]

Brief:
Lots of ODD-METER POP/ROCK SONGS (in a wide range of styles) with Male or Female Vocals are needed by an EXCLUSIVE Music Library with an incredibly long list of placements on TV and Major Motion Pictures, many of which were secured with TAXI members' music!

They're on the lookout for Songs in the general stylistic ballpark of the following references:

"symptom of life" by WILLOW

"Everything In Its Right Place" by Radiohead

"I Went Dancing With My Sister" by Sufjan Stevens

"Goliath" by Karnivool

"Animals" by Muse

Please submit original and well-crafted Songs with odd meters or unorthodox time signatures! This Company is looking for a wide range of sounds and styles, including Pop, Rock, Indie, Folk, etc. Meters such as 5/4, 7/4, 7/8, 9/8, 11/8, 13/8, and others like them could all work, so long as your Song has that slightly off-kilter vibe that you get from listening to these types of Songs. Your submissions should have memorable melodies, creative rhythms, excellent musicianship, solid arrangements, and well-written lyrics. Instrumentation in the general stylistic wheelhouse of the references (and other similar Songs) will work best. If you choose to use any virtual instruments or samples, please ensure that they are high-quality and not dated-sounding. Well-performed and compelling vocal deliveries (Male or Female) are needed as well!

Lyrics should avoid references to specific names, dates, times, places, brands, and profanity. Do NOT copy the referenced artists or songs in any way, shape, or form. Use them only as a general guide for tempo, texture, tone, and overall vibe. Do NOT submit any material with unauthorized samples of any other artists’ music, sounds, or any other form of media. Broadcast Quality is needed.

AI ALERT: This company does not accept or sign music that has been lyrically or melodically composed using generative AI, nor does it accept backing tracks, full instrumental tracks, or vocal performances created with AI.

IMPORTANT! Per our client, your Submissions must:

1) NOT be encumbered by ANY other publishing, licensing, administration, and/or exploitation deals (whether non-exclusive or exclusive) including publishing/licensing agreements with CD Baby Pro, TuneCore, DistroKid, etc.

2) Be 100% original – no soundalikes, Covers, and no recordings with samples.

This Company offers an EXCLUSIVE deal, so the material you submit for this request CANNOT be signed with other publishers or catalogs. Sync fees will be split 50/50. The Publisher will get 100% of the Publisher’s share, and you’ll keep 100% of the Writer’s share. You must own or control your Master and Copyright to submit for this opportunity, and you need to be affiliated with a Performing Rights Organization for this company to include your music in their catalog. Please submit as many Songs as you'd like, online or per CD. Submissions must be received no later than 11:59 PM (PDT) on Wednesday, March 26th, 2025. TAXI # S250326DM

Feedback: https://www.taxi.com/members/DVGQpc37Tk ... p-fb_wag3w

Track: https://www.taxi.com/members/DVGQpc37Tk ... Ew-crumble

It has the Odd Meter that they were looking for, but not a strong enough chorus melody/hook.... Any suggestions/feedback/advice is welcome, since this is how we all get better! Thanks in advance

[douglasricketts]

Hi Bradley, I think it's a good rock track. Good! And remember, I used to pick hits for rock radio back in the day (2000s). But I've noticed the screeners are really pushing for GREAT. Like, a Neil Young "Hey Hey" chorus isn't going to do it anymore, it has to be a Freddy Mercury melody. I'd wager a more melodic chorus would have won the day with this one. It'll find a home somewhere, as usual for your music the performances are solid!

[BradleyHagen]

Thanks Douglas, I really appreciate your time! I just cannot seem to come up with anything else on this one...lol

[macomposer]

Hey Brad,

This is a really awesome track man! Just loved it! I think it will definitely find a home.. Write, Submit, Forget, right... Onward!!!

Mark

[BradleyHagen]

Thanks Mark!

[VanderBoegh]

Ayyy Brad! The song itself is cool - you've got the instruments sounding nice and rockin', and did a GREAT job using wild meters without drawing attention to them in an awkward way. Nailed that aspect!

For me, the vocal is buried and hard to make out the lyrics, and the vocal itself doesn't have the polish that I'd expect from such great production on the music bed. Not sure if it's the voice itself (maybe?), or perhaps just the treatment of it. But I do know it was hard to understand a lot of it, other than the "down to the ground" line.

~~Matt

[BradleyHagen]

Thanks Matt- I totally get it....older mix! thanks for listening Dude, and have a great weekend~

[WSAO]

I noticed that you had a song forwarded in this listing—great job, by the way!
To be honest, I personally preferred this one. I found it easier to connect with the melody compared to the other.
Opinions and critiques are that’s totally subjective...
Keep rocking, mate.

[BradleyHagen]

Thanks for listening Andre!