Power Ballad (Forum Improved 2x)

[ideascapes]

In the time I have spent working on this song, I usually complete 2 or 3--I'm obsessing, I guess! Comments from forum members have twice helped improve this and I'm posting again after having tweaked a few things (added live drums, e guitar sound).Previous notes here pointed to the need to shorten; I haven't done that yet, only because I think the new mix helps contrast and interest. I still plan to cut a few lines here and there (probably half both the first chorus and bridge) and change the ending.At the risk of boring you with another listen, I'd appreciate any last comments from those still hanging on.I intend this to stand on its own as broadcast quality, but also plan to pitch to Adult Contemporary artists as a power ballad.Thanks in advance!Vince------------------------------------www.taxi.com/ideascapesSong Title: How Can There Be Love (When Love Walked Out On Me)?

[k o star]

Wow Vince...This track is now at least 10 times better than the last time I heard...Production and performance wise that is... Did U re-record the vocal parts?Definitely pitch this man!!!I'd say it was worth the obsessing!Peace,Kel

[heinsite]

hey vince, still a damned good song,i have some suggestions, take 'em or leave 'em, but i can hear them POSSIBLY improving the song somewhat, and also the length issue..what i would do is--The title is How Can There Be Love, but no need to change any lyrics at all, it's ok to end the chorus as you've done IMHO.--with the drum entry at 3:24-ish or so, i'd then cut right to your real hook/title and end this with what would then be an outro chorus, and that would start at about your 3:50 mark. can you hear it? that would mean going from 3:24 or so right to the 3:50 "How can there be love, how can there be love?" since this is your hook/title, you'd be pounding it again, and it fits nicely...again, in my opinion.--the last thing i'd do is end your song (more dramatic IMHO) at your current 4:07 mark or so, and then go straight to your piano ending at 4:23 or so, and bam, it's done as it drifts offf....those are my suggetions, i'm no producer, but i can really hear this quality tune coming more together...but again, great job, and that's just what my ear hears...it's been wrong before...LOL. best of luck,warren

[aldicicco]

Hey Vince,Power ballads aren't my bag, but I thought I'd make a few comments.Super Job! I really can envision this being on the radio (and SOON I might add).Two small nits:1. The spoken "on me" got a tad old by the end. Can this be sung the last time? I think it would add to the drama.2. I kept waiting for the key to shift somewhere; either on the bridge or the last verse/chorus. A half note modulation on the last go-around might also be an effective way to heighten the emotion of this song.As you know, this isn't my forte. So please accept my congratulations on a wonderful tune and accept my comments for what they're worth. Best wishes,Al

[feaker]

VinceGood luck trying to improve on this. I think you are there.I agree with the spoken "on me".Would have liked to have seen a short instrumental break earlier on. Similar to the end.Lots of passion in your singers vox. Harmonies up maybe a touch?Very very nice song.Paul