Re: A Portrait Incomplete

lwj001 · Post by **lwj001** » Wed Dec 20, 2006 8:16 am

http://www.pic-a-pagediscounts.com/Real ... .htmlHello walter327. OK, here's my input, mostly for added rhyming:A Portrait IncompleteSweeping dust and cobwebs from the floorTryin' to paint Your picture with these words (Tryin' to paint Your picture with a music score)Your delicate featuresescaping the rhymeand i just can't be satisfied (satisfied this time)Chorus:'til I can sing all of Youin measures notes and song (in measures notes and song that glows)strings and chords (strings and chords of You)that Heaven must compose (that only Heaven can compose)and I can't do this by myselfI need the angels helpif I'm to lay it all down (if I'm to get it off the shelf)But, I just don't know how (but I just don't know the words)I can ever do You justice, my LordOh, my God beyond description Who loves this human raceYou gave Your Only Son so that all may know Your graceand I'll never understand and II'll not be satisfied 'til I...Chorus:

walter327 · Post by **walter327** » Thu Dec 21, 2006 8:32 am

Okay, when I post a set of lyrics, I'm not normally looking for a rewrite of the song. No offense. It's just that I know how the song goes. I'm looking for thoughts on the song itself and maybe how it speaks to the reader/potential listener. Thanks, though, folks. I do apprec. your thoughts.Walter327

Casey H · Post by **Casey H** » Thu Dec 21, 2006 9:25 am

lwj001 · Post by **lwj001** » Thu Dec 21, 2006 12:06 pm

Hi walter327. I'm not offended. After all, it's your song.Hurowitz, I tried that first line. It's really not that hard. If you just hang onto the ending, it's easy:"Copyright 2006 through WWOCRrrrrrrr"Is a right good mix for an eight bar line

walter327 · Post by **walter327** » Fri Dec 22, 2006 6:31 am

Oh, you guys are SOOO funny. It's a word like the muppet used to say, " Wacka-wacka-wacka", just spelled differently. Ain't you folks got no imaginitation.