Reflection Of Time

[cjdenecia]

Nov 20, 2008, 9:37pm, christig wrote:Hi all.I've been working on this piece and was hoping for some feedback. I'm wanting to submit this for tv/film placements.I've used EWQL for my orchestra and Ivory for the piano. Any help would be greatly appreciated!Reflection Of Timehttp://www.taximusic.com/stream/185704/reflect ... .mp3thanks Christichristi, I'm not sure what exact feedback you're looking for ... so ...just thoughts on a page ....on the vibe ... what I hear is initially is dark and yet hopeful ... intimate and lightly salted with tears ... but it resolves to something a bit more positive as it moves on - but then returns to it's base.but then, suddenly - the tension is extreme - maybe too extreme as it outros ... or at least, you didn't give me as the listener, the time to adapt to the change of mood. it jumped right in and then was taken from me before I could actually wrap the resolution around my lil' pumpkin head ...it's a rollercoaster emotionally. and because it's not a pop song, I feel it's just too short to be as powerful as it could be if you let it develop. to me, I'd be thinking that if it were picked up for tv or film, they'd just be editing as necessary - maybe even bringing the song in and out according to scene and song ... for tv - finding the scene is possible but it's more likely a movie passage.the basic voicings used were quite decent - obviously not played by the symphony but certainly convincing for what you're looking for at this level. I could be wrong but I'd think if there was interest, you'd be more than willing to make the track more organic. but maybe they want "good to go" material. I don't know - I'm not taxi.but it is a piece with worth. and could find a home in some chick flick that I'd fall asleep during ... (not cus of your track but cus of the flick itself ...)

[christig]

Thanks CJ.I appreciate you taking a listen and sharing your thoughts with me. Some definite things to ponder . . .

[kitz]

Hi Christi,This is a beautiful piece! I tend to agree with Steven on his points. I would personally like to hear much more intense dynamics in the piano and everything else for that matter. It's a beautiful melody and the movement that you could create dynamically could be far more dramatic and fulfilling. That may mean finding a real string section to up the beauty a ton. Adding percussion in places and some low end strings. That's a hard spot to get to but I think this song is worth the extra effort. To me the piece sounds a bit forlorn at this point and that may be what you were shooting for but I think working the dynamic level of the instruments would add a whole lot.IMO the notes are all there. Just need to pump it up!!Just my 2 cents,Kitz

[geo]

Hey Christi... way outa my genre but one of my secret joys is to listen to these types of pieces here.... I love this a lot.... even with synthy strings I found myself swept up in the emotion of the piece... it's beautiful ... I got nothing constructive to offer that hasn't been mentioned above.... just wanted to say I enjoyed this.... but you most likely figured that out by now....Peace, Geo

[christig]

Thanks Kitz and Geo for you kind words.Geo, I'm glad you enjoyed the emotion. That's what I want people to feel. Kitz, yes, I was going for the forlorn inward mood. A real orchestra would be fun! I would love to do that at some point. I need to get a few more pieces I want to record to make it worth while. Thanks again everyone!

[jay10music]

CHRIS.....I'm a little late but what the hell..... I have found on the forums feed back, a trick taught by the elders. There's a couple above that mentioned doing 2 forms of the track and submitting them both..I have had a few songs posted that were critiqued on possitives and negs.So I took every body's input and changed the piece accordingly..But I summitted both tracks. 4 out of six were forwarded..Those were the ones I fixed...The other 2 got forwarded 2. So u see it doesent hurt 2 do 2 different tracks of the same song...Not at all...Just cost u more $$$$$$$$$$$ JMOP......Jay.....

[christig]

Thanks Jay! (You're right on time)!I have a piano version of this too. You're right the more versions the better!

[mojobone]

I could hear this with brass, even. The consensus seems to be 'nearly there as is, but rife with potential'. I think it's usable now, if you fix that tiny marcato niggle.

[christig]

A "niggle" you say?! Love it! I'll have to add it to my vocab. Thanks for listening and commenting Mojo.

[aldicicco]

Hi Christy,I'm way way late, but I've been on vacation.It's a lovely piece and in my estimation has a lot of potential.I agree with Vince (early on) that you may wish to consider two versions. I believe that one version MUST be your original thought carried through further development. It is such a tender piece that you can carry it through great emotion without having to raise the volume much at all. Perhaps a little more chord and melodic development might take it where it wants to go.Best of luck with this. You have a solid foundation to work from.BTW - I agree with the comments on the strings. I was taken out of the music around the 1:30 mark.Al