Revisions based on return feedback

[AnneHouse]

Hi all - I have a return that said to resolve the refrain a little more and fix a plosive / timing on a section. I have added a repeat of the hook and am asking for feedback on whether the corrections sounds ok.
I would truly appreciate your fresh ears and honest feedback on the following points:
1. since I'm working from stems, did I get the the edited track is tonally similar to the original
2. do the chorus changes add or detract to the song
3. any other comments / suggestions

The changes are at the chorus sections, around :54, 1:53, the repaired edit on "WHEN" is approx in the second chorus at 1:54

The original: https://soundcloud.com/.../right-beside ... AZUOPPDOjO
The corrected version: https://soundcloud.com/.../rby-correcti ... o2EFUiqJur
Thanks!!!

[cosmicdolphin]

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