Same Shirt Different Day (added Taxi critique)

[cameron]

Hi gang,Just finished this tune tonight. It's meant to be country hence the backhoe references. My ears are fried right now and I suppose tomorrow I'll hear things that need fixing, but any opinions are much appreciated.As usual, keep in mind that I'm a songwriter (arguably) and not a singer. Mostly interested in what the song needs and whether it warrants a pro demo. If so, could I use this home recording with some tweaks and real vocals?Thanks!Camhttp://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_id=1708 ... m=trueSame Shirt Different DayEvery morning after I get upI make my coffee and I pour a cupI walk the dog and I feed the catand I start out every day like thatHead for the kitchen right at half past sixto eat my Pop Tart and my bowl of Trixthen I put on on my boots and my company shirtand make the 20 minute drive to workSame shirt, different dayone of these times I'm going to run awayI'm gonna head to the Florida Keys to staysame shirt, different dayScrape the ice off the ChevroletLooks like the traffic's pretty bad todayand the tire on my backhoe is going flatseems I start out everyday like thatI can work up a sweat in my polo shirtbut I look real nice while I shovel dirtI keep her clean, she's easy careand every minute of the day she's thereSame shirt, different dayI'd like to pack it up and go awayto spend all of my time on some island baysame shirt, different dayAnd damn I look goodBut it's sure gettin' oldEveryday just deeper in the hole Same shirt, different daytoo much work and too little pay still I fire up my backhoe and dig awaysame shirt, different day

[feaker]

CamOnce again your chorus is sooooo catchy.Boy can I relate to the same shirt deal.Sounds slightly magaritiville (sp?) ?Really like the guitar in the first part.Likeable after one listen is hard to pull off. You did it:)Paul

[liamkelly]

Same shirt, huh? Good lyric, Cam and very catchy chorus Enjoyed this!Was a bit confused by the 'I can work up a sweat in my polo shirt' line. But it's a small thing and I'm no great lyric analyser.Whether to get it demo'd? Well, I'm no country expert but I say go for it if it's within your means. I'm not so sure about using your guitar tracking on a pro demo. 2c.Liam

[jay10music]

CAM....I enjoy your voice very much .... Love the song and lyrics....Good hook and chorus.. I don't know about the production...Seems good but maybe could have a little slide guitar to warm it up more..Other than that ....good work....JMO.....Jay....

[zoom]

Ok.... chiming in on this thread a little late... Good tune Cam!Great Jimmy Buffet type of song with a "blue collar" theme. Did you stay away from my bad reference because it's cliche? I would agree with everyone about polo shirt.... maybe change that to "workin' shirt" or something like that. Still gives a descriptor without having a contrasting image.While I think your demo is ok, I think you need to refine your instrument choices for the virtual instruments before you're ready for a pro voice to come in. That electric piano opening riff is a little harsh and doesn't mesh with the rest of the song IMO (probably why you buried it in the mix after the first time through). Possibly something with a softer attack on it, which then you could bring out more in the mix. The drums are ok, but seem a little stiff and synthy.... which could be ok for a demo, but once you get a studio voice on it could make the music seem only average, which for some higher bar listings may result in an R.Plus, this song really could be placed in tv/film pretty easily I would think, so upping to a full on demo could be a good choice too.HTH Cam.... I enjoyed the listen!

[zoom]

Sept 25, 2008, 9:22am, geo wrote:Sept 25, 2008, 7:56am, heinsite wrote:"company shirt" could work too with slight rephrasing of the line, also reinforces you're workin' for "the man." LOL. "i work up a sweat in my company shirt.", yeah, could work...whWarren beat me to it.... I was thinking company shirt too.... cool song Cam... love the pop tart / Twix line....GeoUmmm.... he already said that in the first verse... just trying for some other alternatives

[geo]

Sept 25, 2008, 11:59am, zoom wrote:Sept 25, 2008, 9:22am, geo wrote:Warren beat me to it.... I was thinking company shirt too.... cool song Cam... love the pop tart / Twix line....GeoUmmm.... he already said that in the first verse... just trying for some other alternatives I think it should be "that company shirt" in the second verse.... the song is "same shirt, different day"... to use the same phrase works.... plus gives no doubt what shirt you are refering too... don't over think it....Peace, Geo

[liamkelly]

I like how Cam refers to the preppy shirt in V2 as a contrast to the otherwise earthy tone. I just didn't get what he meant by 'polo shirt' initially.Just saying..... Peep and all that

[cameron]

Hey Liam,I understand you're rooming with Steve at the Rally. I'll pay you ten bucks to play a CD of this song over and over in your room. It's a private joke, but trust me, he'll love it.Cameron

[liamkelly]

Sept 25, 2008, 2:14pm, cameron wrote:Hey Liam,I understand you're rooming with Steve at the Rally. I'll pay you ten bucks to play a CD of this song over and over in your room. It's a private joke, but trust me, he'll love it.CameronDeal! You're at the Rally, right? If so, really looking forward to hooking up!