Quote:Quote:Got something for us to hear? AndréDon't mean to hijack this thread, as you asked that in another, but since this is for the same listing thought I would post here.The first song I'm submitting is in okay shape for a song demo, but wasn't recorded for this listing. It's on my main Broadjam site named I Didn't Fall In LoveHey Aub-Sorry to hit you so late with this response - I pulled an all-nighter with new baby and needed to get some shut-eye this afternoon. Let me start by saying that I don't consider myself an expert in this genre, but I'm happy to share my thoughts about your tunes.This first song is a pleasure to listen to; it has great energy, great production (as all your songs do), and unique chord changes that kept my interest.I don't think it's a strong contender for this listing, though...even when I envision it sung by a singer with a more R&B-styled voice, its changes and direction aren't reminiscent of the reference artists. Also, the hook didn't seem to stand out enough; this may be because it sits in the middle of the chorus and is only heard once per chorus.I like your voice, too...you sing with a lot of emotion and style. Your vocal delivery is more 80's rock than soul or R&B, but you seem aware of that in your comments.Quote:The next one I'm STILL working on. I try not to post anything this raw, but I'm under the gun and would like your feedback because this genre is not my forte. Hope to get some free time this afternoon to drop in the bridge and tweak the mix a bit. I wrote this specifically for this listing. I'm guessing that this is for Elliot, but who knows. My voice is not suited for this, but this is not an artist submission anyway... I'm going to take a potshot with this one. If I have time I'll at least clean up the vocal scratch. I hate the intro, but for now it is what it is. Tried to keep it simple, just establishing the groove and melodic structure.Whatchu Gonna Do (Without Me)Another catchy, infectious groove. This one's closer to the mark, with hints of Macy Gray in the chord changes and lyrical content. It's still a stretch to call it R&B in my view, though, and it doesn't evoke any of the reference artists to me.The chorus is more prominent and memorable, partially due to the striking chord change at the words "What you gonna do without me," which ironically is part of what pulls this song away from the R&B sound.I also hear some Squeeze in this one (which is a thuimbs up by me but maybe not the screener), with the descending bass lines and synchopated piano parts.Quote:The third, I'm still contemplating submitting. It's a piano/vocal only, raw song demo. It would need some R&B treatment, but I think it might work as a Neo-Soul... just questioning if the song itself is good enough to submit.Circle of HopeI may not even be in the ballpark stylistically, but wanted to push my boundaries.Thanks for any input.AubI actually think this one has the most potential because of its gospel-sounding chord progression and bold melodic lines. It's more pop in its current incarnation, but even now I can hear the robed choir singing out over the lead lines.It's still not neo-soul, but in my view it could sit nicely in that crowd if arranged properly.Here are some general thoughts about all your pieces:- Even though your production is very creative and effective, I found your sound palettes to be a bit off the mark for this listing, especially the DX7-sounding FM bass guitar which puts a time stamp on the tracks. I'd go with a real bass (or a great fingered sample like the Spectrasonics Trilogy) or a moog-style synth bass.- Except for the last piece, there's more complexity in the chord changes than the genre calls for. You do hear very interesting changes in R&B, but they're structured differently and still don't occur quite as often. Nomi's recently posted Dance Hall/Reggae/Calypso songs were called "authentic" by the screener, I think that's probably because she resisted the temptation to overcomplicate them (among other reasons). Granted, this is a different style.- Your songs all flow and build very well, but I don't find your choruses to be different enough in melodic and rhythmic structure from the verses to really pop out like this listing and most others will likely call for.Awesome work, though! I look forward to hearing more of your work.Good luck,Andre
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