Structured Faith

[brandonjohns]

Herrroooo Everyone!!!NEW TO TAXI AND HOPING FOR SOME FEEDBACK AND ENCOURAGEMENT. HERE ARE THE LYRICS FOR ONE OF MY FIRST THREE SONGS. THEY ARE ROUGH TRACKS WITH SCRATCH VOCALS. I'M BACK IN THE STUDIO TOMORROW FOR MORE MIXING.THANK YOU IN ADVANCE....BRANDON JOHNS here they are....Structured Faith by Brandon Johns Album: Broken HaloArcane structure for a better life, Disciplines and doctrines to memorize.Loving people, pull the wool over their eyes, what you believe, only you can decide.Paper, rock, scissors to choose who is right, Buddha, Mohamad or Jesus Christ.(CHORUS)I found God when I lost my faith.He said look through my eyes to see your own fate.As I look I see the damage I've done,I keep looking to see the man I will become.Fulfillment in life and peace in death.People sowing what they need to live and be blessed.Can we do enough to pass the final test?I want to do good but I fail when I'm pressed.Keep walking, live one day to the next.If there's no heaven at least I have sex.(CHORUS)No more need to hide what's inside me.I let it out and now I am freeThe vision is clearer, but there's so much more to see.I've had a taste of something fulfilling(CHORUS);D

[ideascapes]

Hello brandon. I was going to recommend that you post this in the "Lyric Lovers" sub-forum, but see that you already have done that. You'll probably get some good feedback there. I'm fairly new here too and think double-posting might be frowned upon(?) In any case, I'm a serial perfect-rhymer, so you wouldn't want my comments...Vince

[sgs4u]

4 posts of the same lyric, might get you less attention than you want and/or deserve. Maybe you could delete the other 3 posts/threads? Besides, you want all your comments and critiques to be in one convenient place.