Sunny Skies

[bmete]

Hi Kitz,First, let me say I like your tune, it has a lot of possiblitlities.Second, please take whatever I say with a grain of salt because I am way out of my genre here,I agree with a lot of what the others have said above, two things struck me about this song,1. on the line "We will endure - we will endure", the vocal isn't reassuring that you will endure. maybe take the melodic line up instead of down, or throw more conviction into the voice.2. I'd name the song " when sorrow cries " - to me it's more powerful and I want to hear the song just because of the title.Good luck with it..... ( of course, with these lyric's I think it would also make a great jazz ballad )Bob

[geo]

Hey Kitz.....Cool tune.... got a modern rock vibe going on....I agree with Bob..... "When Sorrow Cries" would be a better hook.... more interesting.... if you swap it out with "Sunny Skies" as is it's a much better tune...I liked the lyrics.... but two lines stood out....I will bring the ocean breeze to rest her in her armsSometimes our little world goes crashing in the dustThink these two could use a little tweaking.... not conversational....The transition into the chorus needs to be smoothed out a bit.... just a fill or smething...Good stuff Kitz!!Peace, Geo

[kitz]

Excellent suggestions guys! Thanks a bunch - will see what I can do.Kitz

[matthoggard]

Kitz,The time change at the chorus just throws the whole thing out of balance. Id say save that just for a musical break in the middle section somewhere. Sort of had a Queen setup to it but for the chorus I think the 7/4 is way too confusing for the average listener.M~!

[silvercord]

Kitz..i really dig the mix... i get a feeling of Tom Petty and the heartbreakers, Steve Miller here...(even Thin Lizzy!:) ((which i all like)This song does seem to take a very progressive approachand not the cookie-cutter package structure that is popularthese days...i have to third that 'when sorry cries' is reallythe hook I hear. You have allot of material here. I say makean alt version (keep this one ofcourse!) but see if youcan develop that strong lift that everyone seems to be addicted to~i do like the bridge(s), brother. but it(they) doesnt really push the chorus...your vocals are really clear...but they seem just a bit too upfrontand dont seem to mix well with the instrumentsdid i say i like the tone of your bass?: )dont let this one go, Kitz..peacegeoff

[kitz]

Thanks for the ideas guys. I am shelving this for a while. I have some other tunes to get down that are far more conventional - so I'll hang on to it and start a rework after some other things get done. Matt I agree the 7/4 is a bit out there but hey we gotta push the envelope on occasion. Geoff thanks!! I will not let this one go - I've been tinkering with it for quite some time now. Thanks for the comment on the bass - it's an old Ibanez that I picked up second hand at a Zoo Music in Dallas many years ago. The previous owner must have played the heck out of it from the looks of the fretboard. It's got Bartolini pickups and it's served me very well. Peas and hominy,Kitz

[cameron]

Hey Kitz,Yeah, it's definitely out there time wise. The rhythm change does seem a bit distracting at first.... not so bad once you figure out where "one" is.The guitars are awesome, but there seem to be too many fills going on at once. Is that you on guitar? Really nice.I also agree the title should be "When Sorrow Cries".Warren, Geo and Vince covered just about everything else I had to say.I should also add that this is "off genre " for me a bit these days. I also grew up on Steely Dan (love 'em) but most people under 35 (if they've ever heard of them) think it's muzak.Cam

[kitz]

Yea Cam, Those are my gits. Strat on the left and Les Paul on the right and in the solo. I've already cut out all the guitar fills I had during the verses up to the solo. I wanted to see what I could do with the fills in 7 so I left them on the end. It was really hard trying to stay focused and play fills in 7. Thanks on the title - I guess that's what she'll be when I finally get done with this one.Kitz