Thoughts? Genre?

[ripd60]

Hi, first post on here. Wanting to know generally what is thought about this track. Thanks for all input.
https://soundcloud.com/user-258184151/overchill

[Zaychi]

I cannot really put my finger on it, but somehow it doesn' t seem cohesive, as if all the instruments are floating in the air apart from eachother, without banding together. It is most obvious in the snare rolls and the broad guitar, but more elements suffer from it.

Just the 2 cent thing, you know...

[ripd60]

No worries! Thanks for giving it a listen.

[AlanHall]

Hi, Rip! Welcome to the forum from another newbie

If the percussion was more trap/hop, this would be a nice 'chill-hop' tune. There have been a few listings for that genre in the last month or so. I guess my complaint is that everything else in the mix could be heard as 'contemporary', but the drums throw it all a little .. sideways?

I'm glad the melody changed up at about 40 seconds, I was hoping something would distract me from the repetition. It seemed just a tad too long without variation.

[ripd60]

Hi, Rip! Welcome to the forum from another newbie

If the percussion was more trap/hop, this would be a nice 'chill-hop' tune. There have been a few listings for that genre in the last month or so. I guess my complaint is that everything else in the mix could be heard as 'contemporary', but the drums throw it all a little .. sideways?

I'm glad the melody changed up at about 40 seconds, I was hoping something would distract me from the repetition. It seemed just a tad too long without variation.

Thanks Alanhall. Appreciate you taking the time to listen and really appreciate your input. I'll look at the drum suggestions. This was under contract with a publisher and it was their suggestion that I drag out the one part for tv/film/sync use possibilities.

[cosmicdolphin]

Like previously said when It starts out leans towards chill type music but then the drums and guitar, bass don't really seem to fit that well.

It sounds like something made off the top of your head rather than to a brief so it's a bit all over the place really, and also it's way too long and repetitive. The repeating synth line is in that frequency that would probably conflict with dialogue too.

The best thing is not to throw a bunch of stuff together and then ask what genre it might be, trying to fit round pegs into square holes. Write specifically for a listing in a genre, study the references, do the research, pull it apart and then using your skills make something that's not a copy but sounds like it belongs on the same playlist.

Mark

[gitanosoy]

Hi,

I think the drum fill is too midi sounding, the guitar playing is to safe and stiff and at some point when it goes into guitar rhythm part it doesn't match up or sync with the other instrument and yes too repetitive unless the listing asked for it.. I have been a victim of the repetitive thing also in the past because I went from the reference tracks but learned quickly that it is just a reference sometimes for sounds and tempo so B sections are more definite now and happen a bit sooner that later in the composition.


good luck and thanks for sharing

[ripd60]

Thanks guys! Lots to learn!