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[deantaylor]

Thanks for the feedback, Dean!

I am definitely in the works of making a bigger chorus by adding heavier drums and such. "selfish robbers" is a pretty weak line, but actually I think I thought of a better one about an hour ago:

Everyone is panicking
And running in the streets
And all the heartless vandals
Are destroying what we need

Hopefully it's better, I haven't had time to think about this line too much yet!

-Jeff

Yep, on a quick read thru, that seems much better! See if it stands the test of time for you.

[heckxx]

Maybe introduce that outro guitar to earlier chorus's? And then you could bring in some more instrumentation for the outro. If there's any way to get to the outro earlier it might be wise as well, gets a tad on the long side by the time you get there. Good tune, catchy, nicely recorded! eo.

Thanks for the suggestions! the song does feel a bit long, for sure. I was able to change the intro so its not as long, and I'm thinking of cutting the length of the first chorus. Putting the outro idea in the earlier choruses could help create excitement, so I'll see if that idea works.

-Jeff