Watch My Whole Life Go By

[wta]

You got some great tips above Doc. I get americana from this tune but thats just my ears talking. This has got back porch written all over it... wta

[heinsite]

hi doc, a couple hours ago i had an bunch of good (mediocre actually) stuff to say, and i got timed out and lost it!anyway, i really like the style of this, not pretentious, very rough obviously, but some of what i remember---most has been said, i DO agree on flopping the verses, your beginning is your end, and vice versa IMHO...--yes, tighten the lyrics and stay away from the cliches (and i didn't like "unreal" in this context for some reason, doesnt fit...)--oh, one big one i remember saying was that in my opinion and you may think this is picky, but huge IMHO, is to stay in the same "person", and i would keep it in the FIRST PERSON (i, me, etc.) all the way through the tune, --and yes, in this piece a simple bridge would improve it.--but i love the vibe to this, and yes, in MY opinion, it's country, and pretty traditional. the trick will be revitalizing this and keeping the "rough" charm that it has right now...that's all i got for now, keep up the good work, and pare down those lyrics, and more image, less generality is the key...the best to you, nice to meet you,warren

[rivercitymusic]

Thanks again to you all. Being that i really don't sing or play except as i have said at a campfire or a back porch, or in one instance a back porch that was on fire, but that's another story.It's good to get feedback from real performing artists/pros. You folks are an a totally different level than i am and it provides a view of what i do that i could never get anywhere else.Thanks for the bridge explanation, it haunted me from the day it was stated and i had a hell of a time getting it understood. It's really like the transition i was referring to on the musical side of a song. I need to find some lyrical bridges to go over and understand them now.heinsite, give me an example of the "staying in the same person" if you would. I'm lost here too. Any advice is good advice.Thanks again,And atw, are you georgen harrisons son? Dam, you'd make a perfect actor for his life story unless my abusive 60's have me still wandering around in a haze!lolDoc