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Would like opinions on this song please

Post by mcanty » Sun Mar 15, 2009 11:42 am

It's called "It Won't Be Me" and I am going for modern pop.http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplaye ... 28166&q=hi

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Post by k o star » Sun Mar 15, 2009 1:32 pm

Nice voice... Just thinkin, might be interesting to add a little flanger or phaser fx to the vocal part just before the Chorus... just that little portion. Hmmm, still need a little polishing up on the vocals for the Chorus parts, especially the emotive singing part. Well, those are just my opinions, hope it may help... however, very good track! =)-Kel
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Post by marcblack30 » Sun Mar 15, 2009 2:38 pm

hey mcanty, i really like this song! i think it could be a little longer, i wasn't ready for the fade out. maybe you could write an ending instead of a fade out, but longer for sure, maybe go to 4min.i kept wanting it build and get "bigger" production wise throughout.it reminded me a bit of "in the air tonight" by phil collins , which is cool.i think it's a great song with a lot of potential.vocals sounded fine to me.marc
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Post by mcanty » Mon Mar 16, 2009 4:12 am

thanks guys. i am satisfied with everything except for the lead chorus vocals. they sound too thin to me.

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Post by ig88 » Tue Mar 17, 2009 12:56 pm

Mix is kinda quiet, not a bad mood. You should toss a compressor on those drums and pump them up like most pop songs would do. The vocals are kinda dry at parts. You have a good poppy hook that people would dig, the beat needs some work though. Not bad composition. The whole mix needs some work and some kind of progression would be nice, get a little boring

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Post by ibanez468 » Fri Mar 20, 2009 2:43 pm

Hey mcanty!I'm with Marc. It sounds like it wants to burst open at some point with larger production. I actually think ya' got sumpin' there, it just seems like there's more to do to it, to fill it out some more. I like it though! Just my $.02.

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Post by watksco » Sun Mar 22, 2009 1:21 pm

I'm with Marc and others. I was waiting for the power chords and drum kit ala 'In the Air Tonight'.My only other though was to chop a sylable or two out of the chorus line to open them out a bit - might give it more flow.Great song all up
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Post by partyofone » Mon Mar 23, 2009 7:58 am

Hey cool tune... it progresses nicely.. the one thing that I'd like to hear tweaked in the piano sound.. take out some low mids and make it less muddy.also what would be cool is in the spaces between the that chorus melody lines is to have some bg's singing echoing certain words or singing ooh's or aah's type stuff. I think that'd take it over the top. nice work!

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