Asking for advice based on lazy return review

[sedge]

ahh, its help, take it or leave it ,

hahah

[ScottFree4All]

Sedge,

I'll take it - thanks for your thoughts.

[melodymessiah]

i agree with the above comments. i think it's a great song, but there's way to many oh's in the chorus. i get the feeling that you've noticed there's a lot of oh's in many of todays hit songs (which you should take note of of course), but in this song it's overkill, in my view. however, i would keep the oh's in the opening, i think it works there. but i would write more specific lyrics to the rest, starting with "oh", and find a words that rhymes with it in the end of the line. something like:

oh
hook up with your life and go
into the mysterious flow
let your foolish garden grow
time to get ridiculous

well, just a suggestion. in your case you may wanna replace the third and fourth line with:

mind no taxi screener, no
he's just plain ridiculous

why he posted the reference track lyrics is beyond my imagination anyway.