Blues instrumental, swing and a miss

[karlhourigan]

I submitted for a blues instrumental call, and this track missed the mark. "... need to showcase a sound that's a little more Soulful rhythmically." The call was
# Y170516BI. I'd love to hear a track that was forwarded for this call so I can learn. Cheers!

Here's my track: Bottle Down https://soundcloud.com/karl-hourigan/bottle-down

[WeWillWriteUaSong]

Me too. Mine said:

"You're in a direction that appeals to the listing but your arrangement needs to be more inventive and with more changes in order to enhance the appeal and style of your hook."

[mikehamm123]

"... need to showcase a sound that's a little more Soulful rhythmically."

Love your playing!

[karlhourigan]

Thanks for the comments. This track did get forwarded for another call. Yay!

[ttully]

Great track Karl!!

I love the low end of the kick drum.....perfect.

Tim

[fuzzbox]

Yeah... nice track!
My only minor criticism... is that it's too long by about 1:00 minute. Then you can condense what's there and get to the point quicker, if you see what I mean. Feel free to disregard.

Cheers Karl

[cosmicdolphin]

II'd love to hear a track that was forwarded for this call so I can learn. Cheers!

Did you check the Forwards Blog and Google them?

[Markzilla]

Love the piece and I really like your playing. It might be a little too long although the listing did say 2 minutes give or take. What does that even mean? Give or take a minutes? A few seconds? Mine was about 30 seconds over the two minutes.

I too had a return on this listiing. The reviewer commented: "I like the rock edge I heard here- but I think it was a bit more of a classic rock edge than the modern rock edge that this listing was after. This is a VERY good song- I just didn't hear it working for this listing." Bummer.

I was at the Road Rally and attempting to apply lessons learned and for the first time wrote for a specific listing. I guess I'll have to google "modern rock edge." I played everything except I programmed the drums. Here's the tune...

https://soundcloud.com/groovefondue/don ... blues-rock

Any thoughts on what I should look for in a listing to submit this piece again?

I hope someone who was forwarded will post so I can see what precisely the reviewer was searching.

[mikehamm123]

kinda hard to nail a listing with a pre-recorded song.

I guess I would listen to the samples they link to, to see what is close.