Is this song catchy enough to "Grab the listener"?

theshammys · Post by **theshammys** » Mon Jun 08, 2009 1:39 pm

Hey Hey!Just wanted to see what you guys think!The listing asked for catchy tunes so this is what i submited...Tell me what ya think!heres my page...The track is called "Sonny Jim"http://www.taximusic.com/hosting/home.p ... cs...Sonny Jim (acoustic)Well I Stumble out of bed it's three o'clockI swear I could hardly walk.and it clicks in head, that what ya saidwill pull a light to my cigarette I swear I'm broke again and runnin' out...Well again it's raining on mejust continuously,sorrow is always feltbut thats the hand that I was deltso I'll bet all my chips lose em' all again...Because its just like that Sonny JimThings take a turn for the grimit's just like that Sonny Jimand if ya just can't win we'll all singIt's like I can't catch a break...another damn mistake...days full of just regret, but what ya see is what ya getand I'll always believe thatya better believe...Im just looking for a way outand I gotta sing out loudthat good folks don't deserve and you got a lot of nerve saying all bad things happen to youBecause its just like that Sonny JimThings take a turn for the grimit's just like that Sonny Jimand if ya just can't win let me hear you sing!Ohhh man its done....It's so gone, Im so sick it's doneso bring it back with a...with another bad daynow it's my turn to saywith a miss or hit, you never quityou gotta make the best of itbecause you only got this one life to live...its just like that Sonny JimThings take a turn for the grimit's just like that Sonny JimThings take a turn for the grimit's just like that Sonny Jimand if ya just can't win we'll all sing

billg · Post by **billg** » Tue Jun 09, 2009 5:15 am

I like this song a lot, good idea and production. Don't know what the listing is about so can't really comment there, but the song is cool.BTW I heard a little something at the end of the clip that you might want to clean up-

wta · Post by **wta** » Tue Jun 09, 2009 4:12 pm

Fun tune boys! I dig this vibe a lot and this would make for a great track on an album that was filled with high tempo punk stuff, nice change of pace. On its own, I was looking for the end at just past the 2 minute mark, just felt like it needed to finish that all but thats coming from a guy who had nothing but drums for over 40 seconds in the intro of his last tune! I found the acoustic just a touch loud but all in all this is a cool tune but sounds like a demo, but what the heck thats punk!

eokamura · Post by **eokamura** » Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:31 am

I like it! The verse is catchy and hooks you in. I kept wanting to hear the chorus go somewhere else. Different chords and a little more melody maybe? As is I don't know if it's catchy enough for a taxi listing but great album track. eo.

yammer107 · Post by **yammer107** » Wed Jun 10, 2009 12:36 pm

I hear the modern/commercial punk of Greenday comming right thru..... particularily with the direction Billy joe has gone lately, ( a bit light ) ... I think this song is perfectly on track with great potential... if thats the track you intended to be on...... Would be cool to flesh out the chorus a bit more as EO suggested.... But always cool to have a striped down tune like this on your CD or set list ( plus rest of the band gets to go pee! ) Chris

theshammys · Post by **theshammys** » Wed Jun 10, 2009 6:12 pm

Thanks guys im liking the feedback!

feaker · Post by **feaker** » Wed Jun 10, 2009 11:27 pm

CoolKinda don't worry be happy.The song is a keeper.You might want to make a track of the first 15 seconds and it extend it to 30 sec. Would be great for a tv comercial. Especially with the whistle. (lost art)Paul

hiredgun · Post by **hiredgun** » Thu Jun 11, 2009 2:38 am

I liked this song a lot , though not in my genre. It was catchy, and light, I left feeling good . Can't think of any thing to improve off the top of my head. Oh yeah one thing I would like to be able to listen and understand the words a little better but often in music understanding the words is optional ie Kurt Cobain I think for this genre you are right on.

Casey H · Post by **Casey H** » Thu Jun 11, 2009 3:07 am

Jun 8, 2009, 4:39pm, theshammys wrote:Hey Hey!Just wanted to see what you guys think!The listing asked for catchy tunes so this is what i submited...Tell me what ya think!heres my page...The track is called "Sonny Jim"http://www.taximusic.com/hosting/home.p ... cs...Sonny Jim (acoustic)Well I Stumble out of bed it's three o'clockI swear I could hardly walk.and it clicks in head, that what ya saidwill pull a light to my cigarette I swear I'm broke again and runnin' out...Well again it's raining on mejust continuously,sorrow is always feltbut thats the hand that I was deltso I'll bet all my chips lose em' all again...Because its just like that Sonny JimThings take a turn for the grimit's just like that Sonny Jimand if ya just can't win we'll all singIt's like I can't catch a break...another damn mistake...days full of just regret, but what ya see is what ya getand I'll always believe thatya better believe...Im just looking for a way outand I gotta sing out loudthat good folks don't deserve and you got a lot of nerve saying all bad things happen to youBecause its just like that Sonny JimThings take a turn for the grimit's just like that Sonny Jimand if ya just can't win let me hear you sing!Ohhh man its done....It's so gone, Im so sick it's doneso bring it back with a...with another bad daynow it's my turn to saywith a miss or hit, you never quityou gotta make the best of itbecause you only got this one life to live...its just like that Sonny JimThings take a turn for the grimit's just like that Sonny JimThings take a turn for the grimit's just like that Sonny Jimand if ya just can't win we'll all sing HiIt's a fun song but without knowing the genre and listing you are targeting, it's hard to give the most effective feedback.It has elements of Green Day (vocal), country or folk (some lyrics), Lou Reed (style), and more. The whistling is probably not giving a current sounding feel-- maybe that's just me.From a pure songwriting point of view, there isn't musical differentiation in the chorus-- same chords, similar melody. Now that does work in some situations especially if it's a film/TV "a la" and it fits the artist-- all depends on your target.POST-EDIT: I just read your bio and see you are a band, playing gigs and building a fan base. Nothing said here really matters if things are going well that way. When you are an artist, if you draw fans and sell CDs, the advice that applies to songwriters for other artists and film/TV doesn't apply to you. Do what works!Please let us know what your target & goal (listing text?) for the song. That will help get you better feedback. It might be a killer for one listing but not at all good for another.Best, Casey

derekmcfarland · Post by **derekmcfarland** » Thu Jun 11, 2009 12:29 pm

Agree with Casey... parts of it have cool vibe and would be good for TV commercials.Judging as a complete song, it is kinda linear and doesn't go anywhere dynamically or melodically.Key is getting the right fit.Vocal could come up in the mix for my taste.Hope this helpsDerek

Is this song catchy enough to "Grab the listener"?

Is this song catchy enough to "Grab the listener"?

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