My First Instrumental--have at it!

[wta]

shhhh, were getting ready to sing our anthem, "Tip Toe through the Tulips" man did Tiny Tim nail this piece!

[cjdenecia]

Dec 2, 2008, 4:03pm, wta wrote: Hear ye, hear ye, the counsel of the children of the daisies may now come to order...there's always one in every room. friggin' hecklers ...hey will - FREEBIRD!!!! play FREEBIRD MAN!!!!

[wta]

long version?

[heinsite]

question is, WHICH two lips? "class, that's enough-- ok, that's it Warren, go see Mr. Pierce" as the class is laughing and i'm in trouble again...ok willie, i've got to email you on that graveyard tune,,,,,didn't i tell you to start it?whoh, cj, take that damned red thing off your face man--you have not been banished yet, and have been a very good boy--you may have a cookie...and i know your next line--DON'T say it!!!! Yaaaah.

[cjdenecia]

oh my warren, I'm sure I have no idea what you're talking about ... that "not allowed red ring" is simply the majority of a bulls eye for the serious archers.wouldn't want them not reading between the lines.

[jay10music]

DUDE....WOW... VERY NICE..... All the Great Ones have Spoken and I will Agree.But I think Cam put it in perspective.....Just loosen up the guitar melody and put more double notes..When he plays double notes around 1:10 & 2:30..Intro..against the single notes they sound great.The single notes sound to hard and sound being read.More Double notes around the melody and Sofen it up.. AND Shazam.... Great SONG....Love it..Good job....good 4 u..Warren.. Jay...

[heinsite]

hi JJ!yep, when i heard them and heard them and heard them i told myself "if really like the change up..." but alas, i got stuck in the song i was hearing, but as i've said, i'm happy with it, and when i got a bit more time will have marty "pump it up" a bit more...he does play excellent guitar....thanks again, the best,warrenps: damn, got to get a pix of myself up there, everytime i see your new one, i think of it...damned lazy good for nothing kids!! LOL...

[kitz]

Warren,I haven't read all of the replys but thought I'd jump in. It's a simple and very pretty melody. I would love to hear it with vocals but if you want to keep it instrumental I would suggest getting away from the guitar and using an instrument much closer to the human voice. Viola comes to mind - or maybe violin/fiddle or maybe sax. I think the drums and particularly the snare sound too far away. Maybe make them more present (or turn this orchestral and experiment with other percussion instruments.Just my 2,Kitz

[heinsite]

thanx kitz!you know, the violin was my first thought, then of course when i don't act on my first thought, trouble...but yes, it is a simple piece, and that was the intention. i guess you're one of just a few that has NOT heard "Too Much I Don't Know" so here it is, (yes, those are words...LOL..but alas, it's also a "feeling" piece, not a typical "story" line...let me know what you think...demo job marty also did, the singer is a metropole singer from LA/Nashville we both agreed on--gave me the feel i wanted...all the best,warren (not posting lyrics, should hear them...)http://www.taximusic.com/download/23187 ... 20Know.mp3

[kitz]

Just listened. I LOVE the 1st and 2nd verses. The chorus is good. It does seem to wander lyrically after that - I do that myself - it hampers the commercial aspect but adds a certain level of personality. I do like the vocal version but to be critical would give more cohesion between the last verses and the earlier verses. I don't know if that helps much but it's just what I hear.Basically, I am not seeing the relationship between the last 2 verses and the 1st 2 verses. I guess, to get to the point, I am missing the central theme throughout lyrically. Maybe it's this pounding headache I've had all day... Will listen again tomorrow...Kitz