Feedback on my first submitted song?

[rogerrose]

This was for listing :LOUISIANA BLUES SONGS WITH VOCALS are needed for an established Blues artist a la Tommy Castro. You can think in terms of Louisiana style or a solid Blues/Rock approach, with the guitar being a primary influence and lead. Undeniable songs are what's needed here - this artist won a 2008 BMA award for Contemporary Blues Album of the Year, so these songs need to be fantastic. We'll need to be very selective here, so please send your very best! Male vocals and lyric perspectives onlyhttp://www.taximusic.com/hosting/home.php?arti ... roseThanks for any inputRoger

[cjdenecia]

well roger .... you do need a bit of guidance regarding how to match your very competent music up to these listings ....or maybe I'm out of touch with LOUISIANA BLUES SONGS.but this won't be ballpark man.what it is though is very cool and a really fine presentation of a modernized david essex soundalike coupled with something else I can't quite put my finger on ....but it's very well recorded. it's engaging and it's moving.the bridge is a bit off cus the vocals and the bed track are a little disjointed. .... but the verses kick ass and the melody works like a tonic to the raw retro rocking bone - and the guitars have a great modern treatment that allow the song to seem a bit old while still capturing fabulous energy and a great balls to the wall rock and roll feel.excellent song. really dig it. hope you find a home for it within these walls that make things worth your while cus it's happening soon ...of course, you'll have to take my opinion with a grain of salt cus I have not published anything this week and I have no formal education and I only just joined taxi last week so I'm not a voice to be considered.or so I'm told.anyway, all that aside, listen to one of these other long timers regarding submissions - they have a grip on what works here. if they chime in ...

[feaker]

RogerThis rocks man.Sounds Beatle-ish ? Very engaging.I don't hear blues, but I'm not too sharp in general.I think choosing the right listing will be your biggest challange.All the elements of a great song are there.Nice to meet you.Paul

[ottlukk]

Roger: Very nice tune, nicely done production, etc. Thanks for sharingOtt

[matto]

Hi Roger,I think this is quite a bit off stylistically, although it does have a somewhat bluesy vibe to it. I think the bigger question here is, is the song itself "undeniable"?IMHO, unfortunately it falls quite a bit short of that mark. It's certainly a good song, but what's missing here is a really unique concept. When you are submitting songs to artists like this guy, who's quite a credible writer in his own right and has co-written with some first rate people, you really need a song idea and lyric that is going to cut thru the clutter of submissions these people are undoubtedly getting, and also be at least as good if not better than the material this artist is (co-)writing himself. Otherwise what would his incentive be to cut YOUR song, rather than write another one himself?I think your song could definitely find a home, most likely in the film and tv realm, cause it sounds great, is well performed, and has a great vibe. But for this high bar listing, IMHO your lyric is just not special enough, both from an overall concept standpoint (it's too ordinary, and there are too many songs like it), as well as on a line by line level, where there are just to many "blues cliches" which we've heard so many times that the whole thing is just too predictable.The bar for these types of cuts is VERY high, and the listing even emphasizes that. I don't think you're gonna make the cut here, but you do have a good song that many music libraries and film/tv music supervisors would probably love to have in their catalogs.HTH,matto

[mistydawn]

Holy shit! I think the guitars blasted me off the couch Hahahahahaha That was AWESOME! My goodness, it was a crazy night out with my girlfriends, out on the town...and tequila too....and REDBULL! Lots of Redbull Your lyrics have to be on the same level as your music....It was a bit like two different personalities? Does that make sense?The lyrics ....have a sense of humor...a style all their own....but they're not congruent with the power of the music.If you give those lyrics some kick...well, I just couldn't imagine

[deantaylor]

Roger,I agree with Misty and Matto .. musically I like it a lot .. lyric could be better. Also, it is probably not bluesy enough for this listing.Dean

[rogerrose]

Thanks for the feedback everyone.I agree with everyone that My song I submitted is not straight up blues. I do Know what Blues is , but I challange anyone to go to "youtube " and just type in "Tommy Castro" which was the only artist reference given, and the first 5 videos shown there, don't have anymore blues vibe than the song I submitted does, if you check out songs 6, 7 , and 8 there, then he does do some standard blues songs.Anyway after hearing the first 5 songs, It made me think of the song that I submitted.( Which I also did not think was Louisiana blues) but that's why I picked that song.But anyway, just trying to say I do agree , my song it's not blues.But wanted to explain why I chose it.Thx for all the feedback. I really appreciate everything , good and bad that you all had to say thoughRoger

[cjdenecia]

Dec 1, 2008, 4:54pm, rogerrose wrote:Thanks for the feedback everyone.I agree with everyone that My song I submitted is not straight up blues. I do Know what Blues is , but I challange anyone to go to "youtube " and just type in "Tommy Castro" which was the only artist reference given, and the first 5 videos shown there, don't have anymore blues vibe than the song I submitted does, if you check out songs 6, 7 , and 8 there, then he does do some standard blues songs.Anyway after hearing the first 5 songs, It made me think of the song that I submitted.( Which I also did not think was Louisiana blues) but that's why I picked that song.But anyway, just trying to say I do agree , my song it's not blues.But wanted to explain why I chose it.Thx for all the feedback. I really appreciate everything , good and bad that you all had to say thoughRogereyup. that's a problem. you're at the mercy of the listings aren't you? had a bit of a conversation with a guy named matt today about just this problem.maybe it's one of those situations where taxi could take a look at these listings and tell their clients "WTF? are you mad? try to keep up!"of course, it'd probably be better if they were a bit more diplomatic but the bottom line is that if clients are not in the ballpark with their requests - how are you supposed to deal with it when you're supposed to submit 2 tunes a month and there's nothing close to what you're doing in the submission list for that month?

[djdale]

Actually, the trend in Nashville is more Southern Rock/Rock oriented tunes. Try a country listing with this one with a slightly different arrangement. You never know...Dale