VER5 (the one we submitted) - for HOMELESS listing

[deantaylor]

Thanks, Bill!!! Glad you approve of our tightrope fix.Thanks, B. Flat (love the name). Agreed, do what you can! Though job and family take some time, too. lol

[leejohnson]

Thanks for all the helpful comments. I really appreciate everyone taking the time to listen and help us!!! This forum is awesome. I am making as many updates as I possibly can. We will repost soon. Lee

[leejohnson]

Hi, here is a new version 4 of Fragile. Please take a listen and let us know your thoughts at this stage. We have tried to address many of the suggestions, and appreciate your input. We may still make more adjustments before the deadline so please feel free to comment about this current version 4. http://www.taximusic.com/song.php?song_ ... Thanks,Lee and Dean

[deantaylor]

After my first few listens to Version 4, I think this is sounding pretty darn good. It feels less upbeat, more fitting of the lyric, and only slightly less 'hooky' I'd say. A good compromise.We'd still like to make the lyric change as pointed out by Geo, but since that is pretty minor, it may have to wait. Tell us what you think. Can't thank you guys enough.Dean

[billg]

Better still! This song sure has come a loong way.

[deantaylor]

Bill, So glad to hear you say that. Thanks for staying with us through all the re-listening. It has reeeeeeally helped! And my co-writer Lee really adjusts quickly and picks up on good ideas!Hope others agree with you, but if not, please tell us .. KEEP IT 100% HONEST!!!DeanPS Lee agrees with you on keeping the vox dry on this one.

[leejohnson]

hey, this was a message from Hummingbird.Hi Lee - I did listen to the last version and I thought it is sounding good! The change on the bridge made it stronger, in my opinion. I still find the vocals a tad dry for my ears, but that could be personal preference. I'd keep this mix, but produce another one with the lead vocals back a notch & compare the two.

[leejohnson]

Thanks again it has been very valuable to get your feedback!Lee

[lc]

After re-reading the listing...I can see where it might've been kind of difficult to come up with something that it demanded. A song about the homeless and everything that could've led to them being that way...and it had to be mid to uptempo. Seems like something like that would kind of demand a slower more solemn kind of feel.I really like what you both have done with it and I think it matches the listing.Here's something, I was at the market today and as I was walking down the aisles, out of nowhere, I started humming the chorus!Best of luck!

[deantaylor]

LC,It is an interesting point you make about tempo. Thanks for all your input and staying with us through several versions. Your feedback was very helpful. We might have ignored Vikki and her 'too happy' comment, because we thought we'd already addressed that and 'fixed' it, but then you came in and seconded her opinion .. that's when I emailed Lee and said .. we better re-think.Love that the chorus stuck with you! That's gratifying to hear!Dean